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Jul 19, 2006, 03:59 PM
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| I have ACE nashers.  Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: SunnyOl'England ;]
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 Credits: 4,051 | *Crappy Horror* The sound of screaming fills the air, I cover my ears as its hard to bear. The sight of bodies spread across the floor, A shadowy figure stepping through my door. The touch of a dagger swipes across my cheek, I fall to my knees as I am so weak. The taste of blood as it traces my lips, Its falling from my head and dripping to my hips. The smell of terror as the shadow draws near, Through the darkness it reveals a spear. I widen my eyes and draw my last breath, The weapon had struck.. this means death. Not like my usual stuff, eh? XD Crappy horror!! Please comment and such ^^
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Jul 19, 2006, 04:02 PM
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Credits: 2,476 | Re: *Crappy Horror* very nice discription of you dies there i fel myself holding that spear very cool way to put your self asa victim . great poem |
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Jul 19, 2006, 10:38 PM
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Credits: 2,051 | Re: *Crappy Horror* Kerry! yay...another poem...wow this ain't hyper  very very nice ^_^ finally a poem i can relate to XD XD
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Jul 20, 2006, 01:31 AM
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| I have ACE nashers. Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: SunnyOl'England ;]
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Credits: 4,051 | Re: *Crappy Horror* I thought I would do a change from the usuall hyper stuff ^^ This is a rare event XD Its hard to believe I wrote this! [it was like a year ago!] You can really relate? yay! Finally I wrote something someone can relate to! Thank you for the comments..
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Jul 20, 2006, 02:04 AM
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| Elie Jelly Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Hell is an understatement
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Credits: 2,051 | Re: *Crappy Horror* Lol...i can relate to some of your past ones...juz this one better XD coz im a depressing and weird person XD XD Wow...a year....kewl ^_^ keep up the good work Kerry 
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Jul 20, 2006, 06:32 AM
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Credits: 1,380 | Re: *Crappy Horror* Critique coming. The sound of screaming fills the air, I cover my ears as its hard to bear. OH! This poem would have been beutiful without the pestering rhyming! The sight of bodies spread across the floor, A shadowy figure stepping through my door. The touch of a dagger swipes across my cheek, I fall to my knees as I am so weak. The taste of blood as it traces my lips, Its falling from my head and dripping to my hips. The smell of terror as the shadow draws near, Through the darkness it reveals a spear. I widen my eyes and draw my last breath, The weapon had struck.. this means death. UGH. The imagery was beautiful! But the rhyming!!!!!!!!!! It ruined the entire poem for me.
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