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    *Crappy Horror*

    The sound of screaming fills the air,
    I cover my ears as its hard to bear.

    The sight of bodies spread across the floor,
    A shadowy figure stepping through my door.

    The touch of a dagger swipes across my cheek,
    I fall to my knees as I am so weak.

    The taste of blood as it traces my lips,
    Its falling from my head and dripping to my hips.

    The smell of terror as the shadow draws near,
    Through the darkness it reveals a spear.

    I widen my eyes and draw my last breath,
    The weapon had struck.. this means death.


    Not like my usual stuff, eh? XD

    Crappy horror!! Please comment and such ^^

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Re: *Crappy Horror*

    very nice discription of you dies there
    i fel myself holding that spear very cool way to
    put your self asa victim . great poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: *Crappy Horror*

    Kerry! yay...another poem...wow this ain't hyper

    very very nice ^_^ finally a poem i can relate to XD XD

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    Re: *Crappy Horror*

    I thought I would do a change from the usuall hyper stuff ^^

    This is a rare event XD

    Its hard to believe I wrote this! [it was like a year ago!] You can really relate? yay! Finally I wrote something someone can relate to!

    Thank you for the comments..

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Re: *Crappy Horror*

    Lol...i can relate to some of your past ones...juz this one better XD coz im a depressing and weird person XD XD

    Wow...a year....kewl ^_^ keep up the good work Kerry

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    Re: *Crappy Horror*

    Critique coming.

    The sound of screaming fills the air,
    I cover my ears as its hard to bear.


    OH! This poem would have been beutiful without the pestering rhyming!

    The sight of bodies spread across the floor,
    A shadowy figure stepping through my door.

    The touch of a dagger swipes across my cheek,
    I fall to my knees as I am so weak.

    The taste of blood as it traces my lips,
    Its falling from my head and dripping to my hips.

    The smell of terror as the shadow draws near,
    Through the darkness it reveals a spear.

    I widen my eyes and draw my last breath,
    The weapon had struck.. this means death.


    UGH. The imagery was beautiful! But the rhyming!!!!!!!!!! It ruined the entire poem for me.
    Seduced by Flesh


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