Crimson Lust Continued

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Oct 07, 2006, 08:39 AM

My teeth withdraw she hits the
floor and die's so quickly ,how fragile
she was no remorse do i have,just
a craving for more.

How i wish she would have
been stronger,fought back a bit
as she satisfied my lust for
blood ,but she faded
away like a star in the
sky when it dies.

I walk away as you lay there
cold and lifeless,the thirst
i crave its undeniable,i see
her walking under the moon
my next victim could it be you?

My teeth withdraw she hits the
floor and die's so quicly ,how fragile
she was no remorse do i have,just
a craving for more.

How i wish she would have
stronger,fought back a bit
as satisfied my lust for
blood ,but she faded
away like a star in the
sky when it dies.

I walk away as you lay there
cold and lifeless,the thirst
i crave its undeniable,i see
her walking under the moon
my next victim could it be you?

Her flesh excites me as i
smell her life as i draw near
to satisfy my lust, she screams
and i muffle her sounds as i
plung my teeth into her throat.

She fights and then it's all done
as her sweet red nectar goes
down my throat i get a high
from the smell of her fear as she
slowly starts fading away.

she was like the other as my lust
is satisfied but it never really is,
my lust for that crimson continues
as it will never go away, i have no
regret for the lives that i take because
that lust must be satisfied

BlueFox1 · Oct 07, 2006, 09:33 AM

Hey Bro!

Dark poem, and an excellent name for it too! I can actually picture myself watching as the life drains out of you victims in this poem! Excellent job Bro! 5 out of 5 from me!

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Oct 07, 2006, 04:35 PM

thank bro im glad you liked and its cool you could picture it

*ketaro* · Oct 07, 2006, 04:50 PM

NIce poem holder, i never thought that you were so freaking good in poetry. Keep it up man.

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Oct 07, 2006, 05:36 PM

thanks ketar i will i did this poem as contuation from the
first poem i wrote a while back,i might keep hte pome going
but not sure yet, and thanks for the comment

animechick · Oct 07, 2006, 06:35 PM

ya knoi reallt took a liking to this one. i lvoe how you told it more as a sotry then as a formatted poem. it gave it more depth.. and it was so true
"i have no
regret for the lives that i take because
that lust must be satisfied"
is so true. many times we have all been guilty of "killing" to get whatever it was we wanted. so true and bluntly stated. good job here

*princesslady* · Oct 07, 2006, 06:45 PM

im scared now.
but i like it holderofdarkchalice it's nice. very vampireish!

TaurusDemon23 · Oct 07, 2006, 06:49 PM

Makes me really thirsty...........I liked how you described it all.....Give it a violin sound track and you'd be set.

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Oct 07, 2006, 06:55 PM

thanks princess and TD im glad you liked it i was
hoping it went over well and it did, i might just make
a continuing poem from this but i will wait and see,
thanks for the comments

CherryBlossom18 · Oct 07, 2006, 06:57 PM

That was a great poem It's perfect for Halloween. I could see that happening to someone in a movie or on tv. You've done a terriffic job as usuall. It was a very dark and mysterious poem and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Othello · Oct 08, 2006, 12:35 PM

Dang HolderOfTheDarkChalice, that was awsome. Vampireish poem hmmm.. Very wicked and perfect. I feel close to this poem, being a vampire and all ;[ ^^ Great job, keep it up!!

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HolderOfTheDarkChalice Tournaments Won: 1 King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,795 Thanks: 21 Thanked 20 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 3,202	Crimson Lust Continued My teeth withdraw she hits the floor and die's so quickly ,how fragile she was no remorse do i have,just a craving for more. How i wish she would have been stronger,fought back a bit as she satisfied my lust for blood ,but she faded away like a star in the sky when it dies. I walk away as you lay there cold and lifeless,the thirst i crave its undeniable,i see her walking under the moon my next victim could it be you? My teeth withdraw she hits the floor and die's so quicly ,how fragile she was no remorse do i have,just a craving for more. How i wish she would have stronger,fought back a bit as satisfied my lust for blood ,but she faded away like a star in the sky when it dies. I walk away as you lay there cold and lifeless,the thirst i crave its undeniable,i see her walking under the moon my next victim could it be you? Her flesh excites me as i smell her life as i draw near to satisfy my lust, she screams and i muffle her sounds as i plung my teeth into her throat. She fights and then it's all done as her sweet red nectar goes down my throat i get a high from the smell of her fear as she slowly starts fading away. she was like the other as my lust is satisfied but it never really is, my lust for that crimson continues as it will never go away, i have no regret for the lives that i take because that lust must be satisfied __________________ thanks mellow your sig is top notch http://www.animeonline.net/links/ Last edited by HolderOfTheDarkChalice; Oct 07, 2006 at 05:35 PM.
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BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	Hey Bro! Dark poem, and an excellent name for it too! I can actually picture myself watching as the life drains out of you victims in this poem! Excellent job Bro! 5 out of 5 from me! __________________
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HolderOfTheDarkChalice Tournaments Won: 1 King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,795 Thanks: 21 Thanked 20 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 3,202	thank bro im glad you liked and its cool you could picture it __________________ thanks mellow your sig is top notch http://www.animeonline.net/links/
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animechick is backkk Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: texas Posts: 799 Thanks: 3 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts Credits: 2,232	ya knoi reallt took a liking to this one. i lvoe how you told it more as a sotry then as a formatted poem. it gave it more depth.. and it was so true "i have no regret for the lives that i take because that lust must be satisfied" is so true. many times we have all been guilty of "killing" to get whatever it was we wanted. so true and bluntly stated. good job here __________________ sig by SasuraiHell [[*she wanted to be a dancer, now all she wants is to be with you*]] www.myspace.com/mourningtonight
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princesslady He loves me not Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: in a castle up north Posts: 1,421 Thanks: 5 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 5,374	im scared now. but i like it holderofdarkchalice it's nice. very vampireish! __________________
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TaurusDemon23 SuperVillain Of AO Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: In the kingdom I built over Mario's dead body...... Posts: 994 Thanks: 0 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 2,552	Makes me really thirsty...........I liked how you described it all.....Give it a violin sound track and you'd be set.
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HolderOfTheDarkChalice Tournaments Won: 1 King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,795 Thanks: 21 Thanked 20 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 3,202	thanks princess and TD im glad you liked it i was hoping it went over well and it did, i might just make a continuing poem from this but i will wait and see, thanks for the comments __________________ thanks mellow your sig is top notch http://www.animeonline.net/links/
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CherryBlossom18 Heavy Metal Goddess Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: a place where the stars shine as bright as the sun Posts: 578 Thanks: 1 Thanked 16 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 2,326	That was a great poem It's perfect for Halloween. I could see that happening to someone in a movie or on tv. You've done a terriffic job as usuall. It was a very dark and mysterious poem and I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Othello Diamond in the Rough Join Date: May 2006 Location: Between the reaches of ones heart, mind and soul...where only a small light lingers. Posts: 177 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 770	Dang HolderOfTheDarkChalice, that was awsome. Vampireish poem hmmm.. Very wicked and perfect. I feel close to this poem, being a vampire and all ;[ ^^ Great job, keep it up!! __________________ Thanks Mischievious Kiss.
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