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    Crimson lust pt. 5

    Blood stained wood , a cross to faded
    to be seen as important or even holy,
    he wake's once more as he lets a hand
    grip the coffin as his lust returns once
    more , a creaking door , foot steps slowed
    as the moon welcomes him.

    He breaths in the night as new life beckons him on
    ,never knowing rest when the sun is gone , always
    craving that sweet and salty drink that only lasts
    for a night , he walks on as he pears into the night
    wondering where his lust will lead him .

    His head raised as he takes in all the smells around him ,
    he licks his lips as he goes for his next taste of crimson,
    he walks oh so slow as he hears breathing , the breath
    has fear which excites him as fear makes the blood much
    sweeter , the man stands trembling unaware of the fate
    that is about to befall him , he only knows that his time
    is close to an end .

    With a gasp that was cut short before a yell his throat
    is cut and teeth sink in as the lust is once again satisfied.
    eye's grow cold ,lips turn blue , breathing now gone he lays
    there motionless as the lust once more is satisfied , nothing
    able to over come but death he walks away with a sigh knowing
    that there will always be a place for him.

    The night goes on as the moon rises higher he See's another
    but they seem indifferent to fear there more ignorant thinking
    the night was meant for them , he get a smile to his face as he
    approaches knowing the sweetest taste is that of a foolish heart,
    they stand there in the night saying evil is eternal , and they worship
    what others fear , he becomes bold and reveals himself.

    Evil my friend is the inosence of child , so pure so comforting for
    those who embrace it and cover them protecting them from the light,
    one would be foolish to think evil and darkness are only on the surface,
    fangs revealed he smiles as this supposed worshiper of the dark shows
    fear as he realises that evil as he thought was just a small insignificant
    part of a shadow that go deeper and darker then anything imagined.

    He takes a step as the man walk backwards trying to find a
    way to take back what he said , but it is to late as his neck
    is snapped and he blood drained , the night full of such delights
    no one really under stands the depths of what evil really is, but could
    there be a ray of hope? who knows but the crimson continues on.
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    this is part 5 of my crimson lust poem/story the story is getting more
    interesting now I'm trying to add more detail though there are some
    things i am having problems adding , anyway comments and suggestions are
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Very scary poem I could imagine everything happening as I read it. Especially the part at the end where his neck was snapped and the blood draining from it. This would make a great horror movie. I can't wait to read part 6.
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    Re: Crimson lust pt. 5

    Yay!!! ^^ I found and read all 5 parts and I liked it very much!!! What a coincidence actually, I put on "Queen of the Damned" music album and went on AO and here it is- a poem about vamires perfectly going together with the song... so cool ^^ lol

    I thought this is the best part, because it seems to have more action than the others and it's different from the others...

    Really enjoyed reading this and will be waiting for the next part.

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    Duuuuuuude! Mr.Chefy-poo! These are great! You should make a book called
    Vampire Memoirs!
    So detailed!

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