HolderOfTheDarkChalice

Today someone had enough
of love ,the pain was to great
for them to bare, they walk
to the edge of forever then
they hesitate.

Let me help you ,push over the
edge love is not for you my Friend
you have done made your choice, i want hesitate
i am your best friend, let me take the heart
ache from you.

My intentions they are cruel but to some
it's just a favour ,why blame me when they
want it over with?

The kid was hurt today someone
picked on him one to many time's.
he he home that day picked up
a gun and never looked back.

With a pull of a trigger kids met god early
because words and the actions of
other's made them that way, some
blame the parent's ,others blame the
school's, my self i blame the kid.

what i say may sound cruel and uncaring
but that's far from the truth cruel intentions
are everywhere and life is my proof.

A man living on others hard work
Lay's on his death bed as people
gather round, he hopes they have
caring words for his last good bye,
but all he will get is a pill over his
face.

Let me end your life no one
cares for you i have pillow in my hand
i will be there for you cause i am your
friend, who will take from this uncaring
world you made when you lived off others.

My intentions they are so cruel
but what one See's as wrong
another See's as an end to there pain.


this poem is about people's true
intention when they hesitate at the
last moment and do what other's think is right.
there are people like this out there. any comments
or suggestions would be appreciated.

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JefferyXie

Each line doesn't seem 2 flow lyk most poems.edit the lines a bit so dat they have a rhythm if not a rhyme.

HolderOfTheDarkChalice

i was trying to make it difrent from what i read here when it came to
flow though i am still working on the puncutations and grammer, thanks you
for you comment

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Sincere

That was interesting. I liked the part about the kid coming home from school best. Nice job.

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A white rose no longer alone
I know who's heart it is to represent
I didn't pick it, but i let it grow
For he's the one that's heaven sent. : I love you, my White Rose.: The Poop Forums

BlueFox1

Bro you did a great job even if the lines didn't flow the way everyone wanted them to! Keep up the great work Bro!

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