"Crying Led Me Owing" <Tanka>

Inuruto · Dec 12, 2007, 01:54 AM

Thanks to Peach for pointing out my mistake/mishap on the Tanka structure I thought I would just try to write one the right way... Thank You Peach!!! ^_^

"Crying"
Love is all I know
That's why the pain inside grows
Tears stay at a flow
A leaky faucet that's broke
In every droplet hurt soaked

"Led Me"
Drenched in own regrets
Loves' eyes dried up thoughts I kept
Led me to forget
Led me a path that's correct
Led me to a life that's blessed

"Owing"
In return I give
My heart for helping me live
I owe her that gift
I am back to the old days
A prisoner to Love's ways

Clorox · Dec 24, 2007, 09:59 PM

I had to search for this poem you wrote... lol Ever since you told me you had written a poem explaining LOVE's hold on you & how it can affect one who is trapped in it's grasp & bring the best of the worst in someone... Meaning that love can bring you out of a slump, but also put you right back in it... That is why in your last couple of stanzas you are "back to the old days & a prisoner of love's ways"...

I must say I am glad I took the time to come visit this site to see this poem you wrote... Thanks for the little hints to look for also even though I don't think I needed them cause, if no one can understand your writing you better believe that I can... ; )

You know that I am fascinated with all your writings cause as the reader you have to loook in between the lines to catch the message...

I must say MERRY CHRISTMAS!!! Sorry I haven't visited in a while... Been a lil' busy ( U know) lol Luv' ya'!!!

Dec 12, 2007, 01:54 AM	#1 (permalink)
Inuruto Otaku Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Close to the edge or in my dreams Posts: 334 Thanks: 3 Thanked 9 Times in 7 Posts Credits: 10,596	"Crying Led Me Owing" <Tanka> Thanks to Peach for pointing out my mistake/mishap on the Tanka structure I thought I would just try to write one the right way... Thank You Peach!!! ^_^ *"Crying"* Love is all I know That's why the pain inside grows Tears stay at a flow A leaky faucet that's broke In every droplet hurt soaked *"Led Me"* Drenched in own regrets Loves' eyes dried up thoughts I kept Led me to forget Led me a path that's correct Led me to a life that's blessed *"Owing"* In return I give My heart for helping me live I owe her that gift I am back to the old days A prisoner to Love's ways __________________ gwenibe I can't thank you enough for this awesome sig'... Thank You!!!
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Dec 24, 2007, 09:59 PM	#2 (permalink)
Clorox Newbie Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Where you wanna' be... Posts: 10 Thanks: 1 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 696	Re: "Crying Led Me Owing" <Tanka> I had to search for this poem you wrote... lol Ever since you told me you had written a poem explaining LOVE's hold on you & how it can affect one who is trapped in it's grasp & bring the best of the worst in someone... Meaning that love can bring you out of a slump, but also put you right back in it... That is why in your last couple of stanzas you are "back to the old days & a prisoner of love's ways"... I must say I am glad I took the time to come visit this site to see this poem you wrote... Thanks for the little hints to look for also even though I don't think I needed them cause, if no one can understand your writing you better believe that I can... ; ) You know that I am fascinated with all your writings cause as the reader you have to loook in between the lines to catch the message... I must say MERRY CHRISTMAS!!! Sorry I haven't visited in a while... Been a lil' busy ( U know) lol Luv' ya'!!!
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