Daddy... don't.

You've shattered my spirit
and taken my space.
You've aided in
my falling from grace.

You've taken away
one so close to my heart
and you continue to
haunt me and tear me apart.

You pin me down
crushing my chest
you push your finger into my forehead
and insist you are forever the best.

You follow my shadow,
not even she can get away.
You're in the corner of my eye
all hours of the day.

You've bruised my body
and torn open my skin
and still you believe
what you are doing is not sin.

You're greedy and fowl,
broken inside.
Your mind is on the prowl
and all your body can do is abide.

You leave me night after night
broken and afraid.
Why don't you just end it?
Why can't you just stop your little game?

Why do you do it
with that hard evil stare?
I'm your daughter, Daddy,
or don't you even care?

When I am finally able to leave
what will you do?
there will be no one left
just a lonley old you.

No one to touch
to mame or scorch
I'll be laughing
as you're sitting there, alone and wanting, on that old front porch.

When I'm gone daddy
what will you say?
The only thing you'll miss about me, daddy
is that i was the easiest prey.

You forced your way through
and hurt me so badly
and instead of always smiling
like a normal little girl, I just sit here and frown sadly.

(thinking about adding more later, but it is finished)
I am going to keep adding stanzas every now and then so keep up with it. Think of it as a live poem or a moving story. :)

This is the dark side, and I love it. You have an amazing ability to do from light to dark on the drop of a hat. You remind me of Lucy from Elfin Leid with the poetry. And I totally dig it. When You say ideas requested. you were refering to the title right?

very good poem i love it because people always
seem to leave others in pain or they are left in pain
they never let go of anything because they think they
will always have you and you want go.

thats what i got from this and for the title how about
The Pain Of You? it seems like a good title

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Originally Posted by HolderOfTheDarkChalice

very good poem i love it because people always
seem to leave others in pain or they are left in pain
they never let go of anything because they think they
will always have you and you want go.

thats what i got from this and for the title how about
The Pain Of You? it seems like a good title

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both of you suggested wonderful titles but to make it fare to more people i think i shall wait just a little longer before i edit the title :) and when i read this poem over again it spelled out so clearly rape.

You mean that was not your intention from the beginning?

lol ya thats what i was giting when i read that to it just yelled raep lol

The flow is great.. ^^ I love how the poem goes.. it has vivid description amidst the methaphores... The rhymes are good too ^^ I really enjoyed this poem eventhough it was kinda dark.. spoken out of rage and annoyance... powerful descriptions.. ^^ nicely done... kudos to you.. keep it up :)

Im sure i can't make poems like yours xD

the rape theme was not at all intentional but as i read it again it just appeared... the only matter in which it happens night after night is in a child's case... so the title daddy dont came to mind... it was supposed to fall upon a shatered life theme but i suppose this one felt better.