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    Re: Daddy... don't.

    This is excellent and dark. It is hard to maintain this kind of ryhme throughout a poem and with so little wording. You are a tactical master.

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    Re: Daddy... don't.

    Quote Originally Posted by beast View Post
    This is excellent and dark. It is hard to maintain this kind of ryhme throughout a poem and with so little wording. You are a tactical master.
    Master? No. Tactical? I dont think so. I just write to rhyme! My poems HAVE TO RHYME. If they don't then I feel awkward.

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    Re: Daddy... don't.

    this poem really does make you think about how some people can be so evil and hurt people like that even for a father to his dughter the man thats ment to protect his little girl bein the one hurting her

    i really hope this isnt a real life experiance for u and it is a sin that people do do this and somemtimes it isnt found out intill its too late really enjoyed the poem id like to see how it finishes!

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    Re: Daddy... don't.

    Quote Originally Posted by equinn View Post
    this poem really does make you think about how some people can be so evil and hurt people like that even for a father to his dughter the man thats ment to protect his little girl bein the one hurting her

    i really hope this isnt a real life experiance for u and it is a sin that people do do this and somemtimes it isnt found out intill its too late really enjoyed the poem id like to see how it finishes!
    If you would like to contribute ideas, go ahead. I welcome all readers to incorporate ideas and even whole stanzas to this poem...

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    Wow starfire that was a really great poem
    I know a lot of friends who this poem could relate to it.
    I hate people who would do that to a child.
    Because i've seen the change that can happen to someone after that happens to them day after day.
    Its a very sad thing watch them knowing you can't do anything.

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    Re: Daddy... don't.

    I quite liked this poem, starfire. It's very good and you can definitely see and feel the pain that the daughter felt as this was being done to her.
    I'm standing in the dark calling your name, But when you don't answer,
    I realized everyday it's the same.

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