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    Dandelion

    I would give you a
    flower, but don't you see
    that this dandelion is
    almost just like me?

    It's pretty on the outside,
    but is a terrible weed
    that destroys everything
    around it, kinda like me.

    Not like I try to, but
    it happens naturally.
    Something goes wrong and
    people start to pick at
    Spriggity.

    Plucked from the garden,
    because it does not belong.
    It just wanted to be loved;
    is that so wrong?

    You see, I've had that
    happen to me as well.
    And for a long time I was
    in my own personal hell.

    But now I know how
    the dandelion deals with
    being singled out and
    the other bull-s***.

    It releases itself and
    flies with the wind,
    then it lands on the ground
    with the rest of it's kin.

    It'll plant it's roots
    and let itself grow.
    Only to be plucked out
    again, then away it goes.

    Like the dandelion, I
    don't think I'll fit in,
    but I can still be unique.
    I can still follow the wind.

    So take this dandelion,
    and give it sunshine.
    When you see it in your
    yard, you'll know in due time.

    That even though I'm adrift
    in this breeze we call life,
    I can still float back to
    your garden and be alright.

    **When I say you, I mean anybody who reads this. This wasn't really written "for" anybody, per se--maybe for myself**


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    Re: Dandelion

    I really like this. It made me feel all smiley and warm. Which is interesting considering I don't feel MUCH better then I did yesterday. Thank god for Jamie. She helpped me feel better. And we didn't even doa nything. This is really well written. And while seeming to be longer then most of your writing wasn't winded or anything like that. It flowed well.

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    I dunno...
    On one hand, I get this great feeling of self acceptance... And that made me smile.

    But it also felt sinister... like you were saying "Yeah.. I choke out your flowers, I kill your lawn... but, love me anyway, and if you pull me out... I'll come back!".

    And being sinister does not make me smile... it makes me laugh.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Dandelion

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    I really like this. It made me feel all smiley and warm. Which is interesting considering I don't feel MUCH better then I did yesterday. Thank god for Jamie. She helpped me feel better. And we didn't even doa nything. This is really well written. And while seeming to be longer then most of your writing wasn't winded or anything like that. It flowed well.
    Well, start feeling better dammit! ^_^ No, seriously. Thanks for your comment, Chan. I hope you're doin' better than yesterday. You should write something and post it here, it'll make ya feel better.

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    I dunno...
    On one hand, I get this great feeling of self acceptance... And that made me smile.

    But it also felt sinister... like you were saying "Yeah.. I choke out your flowers, I kill your lawn... but, love me anyway, and if you pull me out... I'll come back!".

    And being sinister does not make me smile... it makes me laugh.
    Laughing counts as smiling, LOL. I'm glad you liked my poem. ^_^ You kinda hit the nail on the head with your remark about it sounding sinister. I really wasn't trying to sound all evil, but y'can't explain yourself too much, or it'll ruin the poem. Thanks for your comment. ^_^


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    @ Peach: Well... the only reason why dandelions have to be like that- choking out other flowers and killing the lawn (though I think its beautiful yellow blooms are much better than just plain green) is because it can't do otherways because people are always trying to destroy it, thinking of it as only a weed not as beautiful flowers- everything in this world tries to protect itself and this is the way dandelions do it (and yes, you can think about all I just said in a figurative meaning too)

    I really liked this poem and read it holding my breath even though I'm in no mood of reading sad poems right now... making me crazy. lol ^^ A very nice poem, and I love the way you've equated yourself to a dandelion, thinking about all the things... it's so cool...

    A great poem, I think this is one of your best- at least one of my favourites ^^ nice work!!!

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    Re: Dandelion

    I wouldn't have a clue what to write about. I'm kinda just floating. Nonexistantly. I feel like a whisp of smoke.. I just don't care.

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    Re: Dandelion

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    @ Peach: Well... the only reason why dandelions have to be like that- choking out other flowers and killing the lawn (though I think its beautiful yellow blooms are much better than just plain green) is because it can't do otherways because people are always trying to destroy it, thinking of it as only a weed not as beautiful flowers- everything in this world tries to protect itself and this is the way dandelions do it (and yes, you can think about all I just said in a figurative meaning too)
    I love the way you think Lasura...
    I've always liked dandelions too, They're always beautiful... even when they're just the little cottony seedlings on a stem. Thats what I liked about this poem too, because dandelions spreading isn't a threat to me... Its a wish come true. Y'know... Like when you blow the seeds around, you're making a wish.
    So, think about that...
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Dandelion

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    @ Peach: Well... the only reason why dandelions have to be like that- choking out other flowers and killing the lawn (though I think its beautiful yellow blooms are much better than just plain green) is because it can't do otherways because people are always trying to destroy it, thinking of it as only a weed not as beautiful flowers- everything in this world tries to protect itself and this is the way dandelions do it (and yes, you can think about all I just said in a figurative meaning too)

    I really liked this poem and read it holding my breath even though I'm in no mood of reading sad poems right now... making me crazy. lol ^^ A very nice poem, and I love the way you've equated yourself to a dandelion, thinking about all the things... it's so cool...

    A great poem, I think this is one of your best- at least one of my favourites ^^ nice work!!!
    I'm honored that you chose this one as one of your favorites, Laura. ^_^
    Thanks a bunch for your comments.

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    I love the way you think Lasura...
    I've always liked dandelions too, They're always beautiful... even when they're just the little cottony seedlings on a stem. Thats what I liked about this poem too, because dandelions spreading isn't a threat to me... Its a wish come true. Y'know... Like when you blow the seeds around, you're making a wish.
    So, think about that...
    I also like dandelions. The only thing better is a lilac. Mmm... Such a sweet scent... Err--Umm.. 'Xcuse me, I had a flower moment there. LOL.


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