Thread: Dandelion

that was beautiful.
i really like your poem, don't stop keep amazing me!!

Originally Posted by kamikazekrn

i liked this poem a lot when i first read it, and even more when i saw lasuras post and reread it
Flow and rhyme were nice, but the form irritated me
For example
I would give you a
flower, but don't you see
that this dandelion is
almost just like me?

Id rather read it as:
I would give you a flower, but don't you see
that this dandelion is almost just like me?

I hate it when sentences get cut off like that. wouldve flowed better my way imo.

9/10

And for some reason i kept on hearing Papa Roach's "To Be Loved" in the background.
Chorus
Whoa I'll never give in
Whoa I'll never give up
Whoa I'll never give in
And I just wanna be, wanna be loved

Why thank you! I'm glad you liked my poem so much. ^_^ I hope you like my future works. If you're new to my writing, there's a bunch of older stuff somewhere in the poem section.

Originally Posted by BAUTIFULSOUL

that was beautiful.
i really like your poem, don't stop keep amazing me!!

And thanks to you, bautifulsoul. ^_^ I'll do my best to keep you entertained.