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    The rememberance of your soft kiss makes me wonder of the great future we

    Will have but in my mind is sticking out the fear of your life trying to dissolve

    It away to make me look like a shadow that i cannot be seen by others thus

    My only emotion is only about you and you refuse all the love saying i have

    Made towards you through all of the remaining time we had like before and

    Now look at us we turned against ones love that never brings us together

    For our happy lives again and i wished you were a different person but i

    Cannot turn back since my destiny is to be a low life so insufficient that can't

    Take responsibility of great lives, ever since you came to me i always saw this

    Darkness inside of you i tries talking to you and you refuse to answer me and

    Now look at you that has deceived the only loving guy you love at most and

    Now abandoned him for his life that you messed up but i will forgive in later

    Time if you do so.

    Magic intervenes when there is love in first sight.

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    Re: Dark Chains (pt.2 of 5)

    Hmmm. Punctuation could save this poem. Strangly, I could relate to certain fragments of this. But, to be honest.. Im unsure if I was relating to the feeling of confusion in the poem (wondering why you're lover does not appreciate you), or if I was just confused by the poems structure...
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    Re: Dark Chains (pt.2 of 5)

    Very good.Your pomes contain such strong emotions.They make me wonder where the emotions come from.Another great poem.

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