Darkness

BlueFox1 · Oct 04, 2006, 04:30 AM

Darkness

It's cold, dark
A place so deep that light can not penatrate
My fears are closing in
The pain is growing, surrounding me I can't breath.

Someone help me please
Anyone, someone I can't feel my heart is broken
My wings have been torn
Darkness

This pain is like the firey pits of hell
The angels I once saw are now devils.
This can't be heaven
Where am I, what is this place?

Why can't I feel
Who are you? Are you love?
Go away leave me be
I don't want to feel anymore

The sunny days are gone
Days of me loving you past the pain are gone
I can't be the man who loved you anymore.
Leave me Alone!

Let the roses that onced bloomed
Die and a lonely death
Feel no more love or happiness
This is the darkness I feel.

I just wrote this poem. It was something I was feeling, I'm not trying to ryhme just letting out the pain.

SousukeSagara · Oct 04, 2006, 05:59 AM

It was really good though... No doubt about it...
You can pass it all through... I suffered the things you are feeling now...

Shinigami's_Angel · Oct 05, 2006, 12:24 AM

OMG!! That was soooo awesome Fox!!! You really did good on this poem.By useing the emotions that you were feeling while writting always makes the poem come 2 life more.Awesome job Fox!

BlueFox1 · Oct 05, 2006, 01:14 AM

Thanks Shinigami's Angel!!! Big Hugs

I'm always trying to get better ya know!

Moon Goddess · Oct 05, 2006, 12:21 PM

that is GREAT! i feel exactly like that cuz of certain events that happened in my life and i just feel like that i wld never find the way out of the darkness im in

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Oct 05, 2006, 12:24 PM

very awesome poem bro i have felt like this sevral times
and you express it well , your poems are getting better
i like this one alot

BlueFox1 · Oct 05, 2006, 12:36 PM

Hey Bro and Moon Goddess,

thanks for the support and I will try to keep them coming I been feeling like this a lot lately and I just need to let it all out! Hopefully this BlueFox won't disappoint!

CherryBlossom18 · Oct 05, 2006, 12:37 PM

Oh my that is a good poem. I really felt the emotions of it. Nice job and I'm sure your next one will be just as good as this one is.

BlueFox1 · Oct 05, 2006, 12:40 PM

Thanks CherryBlossom18! Let's just hope I can feel the pain and anger that I felt in this one in my future of my poems. Once again thank you very much!

Oct 04, 2006, 04:30 AM	#1 (permalink)
BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	Darkness Darkness It's cold, dark A place so deep that light can not penatrate My fears are closing in The pain is growing, surrounding me I can't breath. Someone help me please Anyone, someone I can't feel my heart is broken My wings have been torn Darkness This pain is like the firey pits of hell The angels I once saw are now devils. This can't be heaven Where am I, what is this place? Why can't I feel Who are you? Are you love? Go away leave me be I don't want to feel anymore The sunny days are gone Days of me loving you past the pain are gone I can't be the man who loved you anymore. Leave me Alone! Let the roses that onced bloomed Die and a lonely death Feel no more love or happiness This is the darkness I feel. I just wrote this poem. It was something I was feeling, I'm not trying to ryhme just letting out the pain. __________________
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SousukeSagara Mercenary Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: War zones around the globe... Posts: 528 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 901	It was really good though... No doubt about it... You can pass it all through... I suffered the things you are feeling now... __________________
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Shinigami's_Angel In The Arms Of My Lover Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: In Axel's Closet!! watch's him sleep XD Posts: 687 Thanks: 40 Thanked 7 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 3,351	OMG!! That was soooo awesome Fox!!! You really did good on this poem.By useing the emotions that you were feeling while writting always makes the poem come 2 life more.Awesome job Fox! __________________ Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^
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Oct 05, 2006, 01:14 AM	#4 (permalink)
BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	Thanks Shinigami's Angel!!! Big Hugs I'm always trying to get better ya know! __________________
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Moon Goddess Newbie Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Trinidad Posts: 6 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 130	that is GREAT! i feel exactly like that cuz of certain events that happened in my life and i just feel like that i wld never find the way out of the darkness im in
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HolderOfTheDarkChalice Tournaments Won: 1 King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,795 Thanks: 21 Thanked 20 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 3,202	very awesome poem bro i have felt like this sevral times and you express it well , your poems are getting better i like this one alot __________________ thanks mellow your sig is top notch http://www.animeonline.net/links/
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BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	Hey Bro and Moon Goddess, thanks for the support and I will try to keep them coming I been feeling like this a lot lately and I just need to let it all out! Hopefully this BlueFox won't disappoint! __________________
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CherryBlossom18 Heavy Metal Goddess Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: a place where the stars shine as bright as the sun Posts: 578 Thanks: 1 Thanked 16 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 2,326	Oh my that is a good poem. I really felt the emotions of it. Nice job and I'm sure your next one will be just as good as this one is.
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BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	Thanks CherryBlossom18! Let's just hope I can feel the pain and anger that I felt in this one in my future of my poems. Once again thank you very much! __________________
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