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    Darkness

    It's cold, dark
    A place so deep that light can not penatrate
    My fears are closing in
    The pain is growing, surrounding me I can't breath.

    Someone help me please
    Anyone, someone I can't feel my heart is broken
    My wings have been torn
    Darkness

    This pain is like the firey pits of hell
    The angels I once saw are now devils.
    This can't be heaven
    Where am I, what is this place?

    Why can't I feel
    Who are you? Are you love?
    Go away leave me be
    I don't want to feel anymore

    The sunny days are gone
    Days of me loving you past the pain are gone
    I can't be the man who loved you anymore.
    Leave me Alone!

    Let the roses that onced bloomed
    Die and a lonely death
    Feel no more love or happiness
    This is the darkness I feel.










    I just wrote this poem. It was something I was feeling, I'm not trying to ryhme just letting out the pain.

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    It was really good though... No doubt about it...
    You can pass it all through... I suffered the things you are feeling now...

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    OMG!! That was soooo awesome Fox!!! You really did good on this poem.By useing the emotions that you were feeling while writting always makes the poem come 2 life more.Awesome job Fox!
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    Thanks Shinigami's Angel!!! Big Hugs I'm always trying to get better ya know!

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    that is GREAT! i feel exactly like that cuz of certain events that happened in my life and i just feel like that i wld never find the way out of the darkness im in

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    very awesome poem bro i have felt like this sevral times
    and you express it well , your poems are getting better
    i like this one alot
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Hey Bro and Moon Goddess,

    thanks for the support and I will try to keep them coming I been feeling like this a lot lately and I just need to let it all out! Hopefully this BlueFox won't disappoint!

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    Oh my that is a good poem. I really felt the emotions of it. Nice job and I'm sure your next one will be just as good as this one is.

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