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    Darkness

    shadows all around me
    trying to devour me
    taking me to the darkness
    the darkness where i once came

    then i break free
    and you come for me
    i feel the coldness in the air
    the raging mist around me
    slowly turning to shadows
    then i know your here
    as the air is frozen
    then you take me again

    inside the darkness pain is with me
    i feel it in my heart
    i feel you stabbing my heart till it bleeds
    till it bleeds so darkness can fill me
    then my pain is your pain
    so i am your slave
    your slave of darkness

    as the slave i consume all thats near me
    turning light to dark
    and happiness to pain
    then you have your way
    as i am your slaved
    filled with darkness

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    Re: Darkness

    very nice i loved how you made this into a submissive poem
    that's really dark and in someways appealing to those who
    are into that stuff me personally would totally avoid that lol.

    but the darkness really is a beautiful state of mind
    the quietness the solidarity and confinment it can be
    something that is hard to walk away from when your
    so far away from the light , i find the pome really
    awesome and your wording is great.

    i cant wait to read another
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Darkness

    Oh wow!!! Such a dark poem! I haven't seen that now in these dys it's now love, hurt, angry and sad poems but this pom so dark and deep well to me so I like it! I give it a two thumbs up! Hope to see more of your poems!!!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: Darkness

    great length great emotion great vibe great poem! keep it up. I really enjoy your poems.
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    Re: Darkness

    I really like this poem of yours... you're progressing... fast!
    The slave of darkness... hmm... my my this world is so small...
    I adore the way you talk about darkness here, about being a slave of darkness... I just don't know why it atracts me so much and takes so much attention, I really, truly enjoyed reading this...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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