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    The Day After(part 1)

    In my wake...
    A turbulent storm passed by,Not knowing that it will be the chastity of my life
    A pendulum swinged both ways,As I fall in the abyssmal chaos of my own rave
    Roaring like thunder...My chest beats faster
    A real of solemnly sorrow soon ate my whole entirety
    Unrequited vengeance in my soul soon spread in my innocence

    Upon my wanderings...
    A spectral enlightenment arosed deep down in the sea
    Setting abruptly in the wild fire of catastrophic nuisance there I fainted
    Weary of my sight...A blurry image astonished me...
    She was the chastity of my life
    In my wake a turbulent storm passed by,Not knowing that she will be the chastity of my life
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    She-I was reffering to my beloved girl friend!
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
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    Re: The Day After(part 1)

    This has good imagery which is essential to poetry but a still a bit confusing. What do you mean "chastity of my life?" Remember what Orson Scott Card said. Good work is meant to be read not decoded.

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    Re: The Day After(part 1)

    What do you mean "chastity of my life?"
    Oh yeah,that part..,,I mean that she was the purity or in simple the savior of my life....
    It has a long story to go if I gonna explain it!^_^..
    ANYWAYS THANK YOU BEAST^^!
    I loved her so much.... i would dare to risk my own life only to save her from dying....
    I loved my GF...
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