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Reply With QuoteThat was nice, but no rhytem to it, but a good poem is a good poem and I say this is a good poem including the ending lol, keep it up and I'll be looking forward to your next poem.
The days go by so slow.
As for the nights,
they dont want to end.
As the nights go on ,
you still can't sleep.
All you can do is stare at the wall.
While waiting for the time to pass.
By the time you fall a sleep
you have to get up again,
and you say ahh hell and
here we go again.
Someone please bring me a cup of coffee, I asked.
But you think to yourself 1 cup won't cut it,
but maybe 5 will do.
Now you are wired for the day,
and you can stay still.
Your head is killing and your eyes are pulsing.
You want to lay down to stop to room from spinning.
Finally you are out for few hours.
When you wake again,
you have huge headache.
That was nice, but no rhytem to it, but a good poem is a good poem and I say this is a good poem including the ending lol, keep it up and I'll be looking forward to your next poem.
Great poem Chrystalann describes days and nights to a T yes?
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thank you for feed backOriginally Posted by hellknight
glad you like it thanks again
yea i guess it dose. but it on of my best one though
Last edited by Hassun; Sep 27, 2007 at 03:02 PM. Reason: Double Posting.
your welcome chrystalann it is and watch your double posts there.
ナサン フォオツド
Keep what you hold dear close for one day they may be gone forever!
Make one person smile for it will continue to spread but if you make a frown that will spread as well.http://www.animeonline.net/gallery/s...0/ppuser/57173
Re: days and nights ya i agree nice poem! except when i wake i want to see the sun BURN!!!...oh well.
And i liked the way it didn't rhymealmost every poem rhymes but i like to read the ones that don't either
keep it ups!
-zainab
thank i am glad you like it
and thank for your feed back
sounds like a nightmare kind of life.. but i like the night life more..would be better if my gf is next to me every night.. *sighs* ^^
nice poem.. keep up the good work..and the rhythm thingy.. u wil slowly learn how to... just practice ^^
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