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    Dazed and Confused

    Dazed and Confused

    Off in the distance in your own world,
    What you have kept hidden,
    People see but yet you still hide,

    They see you searching, watching,
    Your searching for answers everywhere you go,
    But yet you still haven't found what your looking for.

    Now looking for a way to close old wounds,
    That are not yet healed, no matter what
    You do or try they stay resistant to change.

    You wonder why, as you try many things,
    But yet they are still resistant to closing,
    All you can see is blame deep within,

    Though your heart may be filled
    with sadness, You still have the ability to
    make others around you happy.

    You have many tears that have been
    Hidden for many years, and yet they
    Are finally being shown.

    Although you forget, that there is
    someone that cares
    about you and how you feel,

    No matter what you do, or how
    Hard you try, you can't block
    The Pain you feel from them.

    The one you're meant for still
    Sees through your shield,
    That you have put up to hide all.

    Although they see through you keep blocking,
    Blocking a darkness that seems to seep through
    They notice and try to change.

    With all you have been through, they see and help,
    Yet you try to hide, hide what you don’t know, but
    Yet you can’t because they already know.

    They know what you don’t, and eventually clear the
    Darkness from you, now with all darkness gone,
    The only thing that remains is the light of a new Journey.
    Last edited by chrystalann2004; Oct 23, 2007 at 05:47 AM.

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    Re: Dazed and Confused

    ooh..a very nice poem.. ^^ this is very good.. i believe this is the longest of your's i have read before.. but an interesting theme there... ^^

    Theres a few spelling mistakes though...

    Nicely done.. keep up the good work ^^

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    ...Hmmm...

    *gets a pen and a copy* *thinks*

    I agree with Rayme, the longest poem I've read from you.
    And the theme is nice, Sadness...you're good at writing sad poems.

    I liked reading it, nice description and everything, ^___^

    Love to read more from you



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    Re: Dazed and Confused

    good job Chrystalann I like it a lot I agree with everyone else though too. keep it up
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    Re: Dazed and Confused

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post


    Theres a few spelling mistakes though...

    Don't you mean "There ARE a few spelling mistakes"


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    Re: Dazed and Confused

    thank for all of your comment
    i glad you like it .
    i think i got all of the mistake as well
    thank all for of feedback as well it much
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    Re: Dazed and Confused

    Wow! This is... Amazing!! ^_^

    I'm sure we've all been there before. Lost, stuck in a rut and resistant to change. (I for one am scared to death of change.) This poem was absolutely beautiful! I couldn't find a single thing wrong with it. I love your writing style! I hope to read more of your work. ^_^

    Mad props!


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    Re: Dazed and Confused

    Wow very nice! Keep up the good work! I dont do much poetry but i know good stuff when I see it! cant wait for more to come up!
    I tryed to see things from your point of view but i cant seem to get my head that far up my ass!
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