Thread: Dead Men Tell No Tales

**shrug** Let's leave it at "You're not supposed to get it; it's insanity . . ."

Shouldn't this tell a tale, a story, send out some kind of message, just as all poems in some way do?

I can understand the poem to a point, but it doesn't flow with itself and the weird way you made the stanzas bother me, very much, it would maybe sound better if you revised *cough* added three more lines to have six complete stanzas *cough* Or simply rewriting what you've got and adding in whatever comes to you.

Of course this is simply my opinion on how I would go about fixing the erm, miscalculations...

The confusion that the poem creates at first gives it a mysterious feel, but the imagery of the poem is awesome I can see these things as you describe them. But the line that got me was:

The tattered funeral veil lifts.
Exorcised by Charlie's Angels,
I fall into a deck of cards.

"Exorcised by Charlie's Angels", the overall poem as I said very mysterious but this line threw me! Keep up the good work and I hope the scholarship thing goes well for you!

I was limited to 20 lines. It's not "miscalculated;" I happen to agree with you, but it's main thing is syllabic reduction. The first set is 9 syllables, then 8, then 7, 6, etc.