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    Deadly Flowers

    Deadly Flowers

    Flowers with such fragrant, elegance and grace
    Always remaining the image of a picture perfect face
    Attracting attention in the eyes of every passing stranger
    Leaving them baffled, oh if only they knew the danger!

    Deceiving looks hidden under each mask
    A different character altogether if you were to ask
    Almost an unimaginable likelihood to wander
    Yet not leaving any clues for all to ponder

    Fishing for a victim with each smile they flash
    Like a lion with sharpened teeth, they lash!
    Stripping you of every shred of dignity and hope
    Reducing you to nothing, left only there to mope

    You made you move so rash and paid the price
    Not knowing you were just a number on their dice
    A pawn that served no further purposes in their eyes
    Merely a bridge that linked the path to sparkling ice

    They’re skillful masters in the game of persuasion
    Forcing you to give in to your utmost temptation
    Lust dances, breaths, and boils beneath your skin
    Leaving behind grief and pain in the faces of your kin

    Retreat now and pray for hope of salvation
    But we all know nothing could change the situation
    The lives that you’ve unknowingly torn has been too much
    Now no one would listen to your pleadings and such

    As you recap and look back on what you did
    As you stand there looking like he’s some innocent kid
    He continues counting the cards writings with “I love you”
    But he knows better because this time you finally left a clue
    Saying that you’ll be leaving, and never coming back
    He knows that it’ll be a family he wished he never had

    Hope it's an improvement from the last. Honest Comment Plz.

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    Re: Deadly Flowers

    Excellent work Elie! O+O I'm really impressed by your hard work, keep it up ^_^

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    Re: Deadly Flowers

    wow!!! amazing stuff, wish I could wright like that
    I'm a Newbie

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    Re: Deadly Flowers

    always a pleasure to read one of your amazing works

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    Re: Deadly Flowers

    wooow that was trippy, i thought i was going crasy reading it. cool tho/

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    Re: Deadly Flowers

    sad very sad elie I'd like to see happy poems from you again and yes I remember your happy poems =P


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    Re: Deadly Flowers

    Quote Originally Posted by Zackraa View Post
    sad very sad elie I'd like to see happy poems from you again and yes I remember your happy poems =P
    I don't do happy poems
    I don't know what you're talking about *yes u do* No I don't! *It's so obvious* Shut up

    I'll ... try ^^ Thx anyways people.

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    Re: Deadly Flowers

    elie, i have to say that.... that i really love this poem..

    i love the part of making that character devious in love.. love the piece great stuff. and i never though some1 could use the riming sequence so well.. great stuff. and i might as well say it one last time for good lucky "great stuff"... 3rd times a charm.. well what i heard.

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