Dear God

*atomik_sprout* · Nov 09, 2007, 08:52 AM

Dear God:

Can you please tell me why
this hurts so bad? Why nothing
ever goes right for me?

Could you explain to me why,
no matter how hard I try, nothing
ever seems to go right?

Have I committed too many sins?
Is it because I don't attend church?
Why must I suffer? I thought I was
a good person...

Please, God.
Please, tell me why I'm dealt so
much pain. Help me understand why
I must face perpetural tribulation.

Tell me why you forbid me to have her!
Break it down to me like I'm a child...

Why am I forced to go without her?
Why do you throw us hurdles that are
impossible to jump over??

Why must I be treated like the
black-sheep of all your creations?

Why did you put me here, only to
let me be subject to pain and depression?
People say you have a weird sense of
humor, but I didn't know they meant "sick"...

Just let me curl up and die...

*RayMe* · Nov 09, 2007, 09:06 AM

@.@ umm my... this is a poem with high negative energy...

I believe it's called as.. life and tests... ^^

Nicely done... i love the flow to this poem... ^^

Ichigo_06 · Nov 09, 2007, 09:09 AM

I agree with ray there is alot of "Negative Chi" as you once told it to me. but the flow is fast and good keep up the work I am sure you will find your answers. keep it up my friend.

*atomik_sprout* · Nov 09, 2007, 09:28 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by RayMe

@.@ umm my... this is a poem with high negative energy...

I believe it's called as.. life and tests... ^^

Nicely done... i love the flow to this poem... ^^

Thanks, Ray. I'm glad you liked it. I couldn't help myself when I wrote this one. I'm pretty much at my breaking point here. I may have to stop writing for a while.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ichigo_06

I agree with ray there is alot of "Negative Chi" as you once told it to me. but the flow is fast and good keep up the work I am sure you will find your answers. keep it up my friend.

It's good to know that someone heeds my words (speaking of the negative chi). Thanks! ^_^ I appreciate your comment as well, it's good to know you like my work.

Ichigo_06 · Nov 09, 2007, 09:32 AM

And I will no matter its moods (if you know what I mean)

highteckdudu · Nov 09, 2007, 09:36 AM

Sad and depresing, i like how you put words together, very creative, people seem so depressed latley! Its kind of confusing to me. but oh well. great job keep it up!

*atomik_sprout* · Nov 09, 2007, 10:33 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by highteckdudu

Sad and depresing, i like how you put words together, very creative, people seem so depressed latley! Its kind of confusing to me. but oh well. great job keep it up!

I swear it must be contagious. Everyone's goin' through some s*** it seems. Anywho, thanks for your comment and I appreciate your support.

Ichigo_06 · Nov 09, 2007, 10:36 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by atomik_sprout

I swear it must be contagious. Everyone's goin' through some s*** it seems. Anywho, thanks for your comment and I appreciate your support.

yes pain is contagious as well as happiness, hell any mood is contagious.

bratling · Nov 09, 2007, 10:48 AM

Sick is right... We're the New-orleans of the universe in a katrina type disaster and gods our gorge bush. we'll never get the attention and assistance we need. Because he simply doesn't care. We don't produce enough I guess.

I really like this poem. It's creatively written and well felt. I like the others you've been writing lately too. Just couldn't bring myself to say anything.

*atomik_sprout* · Nov 09, 2007, 10:58 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by bratling

Sick is right... We're the New-orleans of the universe in a katrina type disaster and gods our gorge bush. we'll never get the attention and assistance we need. Because he simply doesn't care. We don't produce enough I guess.

I really like this poem. It's creatively written and well felt. I like the others you've been writing lately too. Just couldn't bring myself to say anything.

I can understand why. Thank you for your input, it's much appreciated. I think I need a stiff drink...

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atomik_sprout Ramen Addict Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Minneapolis, MN Posts: 2,028 Thanks: 43 Thanked 55 Times in 51 Posts Credits: 85,184	Dear God Dear God: Can you please tell me why this hurts so bad? Why nothing ever goes right for me? Could you explain to me why, no matter how hard I try, nothing ever seems to go right? Have I committed too many sins? Is it because I don't attend church? Why must I suffer? I thought I was a good person... Please, God. Please, tell me why I'm dealt so much pain. Help me understand why I must face perpetural tribulation. Tell me why you forbid me to have her! Break it down to me like I'm a child... Why am I forced to go without her? Why do you throw us hurdles that are impossible to jump over?? Why must I be treated like the black-sheep of all your creations? Why did you put me here, only to let me be subject to pain and depression? People say you have a weird sense of humor, but I didn't know they meant "sick"... Just let me curl up and die... __________________ Kickin' it like a soccer player!
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