Dear You

DEAR you
How ARE you ?

HOPE your enjoying YOUR moment
because I AM going to turn things over

WHATS WRONG ??" you say
I'LL tell you
it's EVERYTHING ABOUT YOU

as far as now
i already KNOW
HOW MUCH I HATE YOU NOW

YOUR FEELINGS
huh ,, I DON'T CARE ABOUT THEM
whether they're near their destruction
or close to their reaction

NOW
AS I SLAM YOU SHUT
I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS CUT

AND I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS ENDED TODAY
becuase i WASN'T envited to it anyway

I WON'T forget
UNTILL i make you REGRET

you DESERVE that
AND YOU deserve more

now i could STAND to you
BECAUSE i have friends
and a person i love

i look at my love's beautiful face
and her snow white smile
that i like to look at once and a while

YOU and YOUR deeds
DO NOT deserve anything like that. EVEN IF IT WAS ONE OF YOUR NEEDS

i wish you feel pain
and feel my hate

i wish you would FEEL how I felt
AND SIT in YOUR place seeing your own HEART melt

the things i feel about you are THREE things
HATE
DESPISE
AND ANGER

I HAVE ONLY ONE THING TO TELL YOU

DEAR YOU ...
I HATE YOU

wo its deep you may have some anger issues there lol just kiddin itz cool

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Originally Posted by powerxxx

AND I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS ENDED TODAY
becuase i WASN'T envited to it anyway

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That's kinda a rip off of Marilyn Manson's (S)aint lyrics isn't it?

"I don't care if your world is ending today
Because I wasn't invited to it anyway"

Quote:

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Originally Posted by powerxxx

as far as now
i already KNOW
HOW MUCH I HATE YOU NOW

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Erm, that stanza doesn't make a whole lot of sense, you should have worded it better.

The structure of the whole poem is abit, all over the place, but the poem itself is very good, although you may wanna double check the poem.

is verry how you say...touching...verry...goood...lovley in fact.
hate is verry stong...an verry strong word..also
YAY I LIKED IT LOTS....but not enough....-._-
JUST KIDDING! i really liked it...and i am really confused...hmmmm....

nice. and deep.*snaps for you*

i really liked it, it had a wonderful exprssion of feeling- good poem, keep it up :)

it was a pretty kool poem powerxx, but in some stanzas didn't rhymed at all, or was it maybe because this poem is a free verse one.

your poems is nice it holds alot of anger and i like that