Dear You

powerxxx · Aug 10, 2006, 07:53 AM

DEAR you
How ARE you ?

HOPE your enjoying YOUR moment
because I AM going to turn things over

WHATS WRONG ??" you say
I'LL tell you
it's EVERYTHING ABOUT YOU

as far as now
i already KNOW
HOW MUCH I HATE YOU NOW

YOUR FEELINGS
huh ,, I DON'T CARE ABOUT THEM
whether they're near their destruction
or close to their reaction

NOW
AS I SLAM YOU SHUT
I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS CUT

AND I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS ENDED TODAY
becuase i WASN'T envited to it anyway

I WON'T forget
UNTILL i make you REGRET

you DESERVE that
AND YOU deserve more

now i could STAND to you
BECAUSE i have friends
and a person i love

i look at my love's beautiful face
and her snow white smile
that i like to look at once and a while

YOU and YOUR deeds
DO NOT deserve anything like that. EVEN IF IT WAS ONE OF YOUR NEEDS

i wish you feel pain
and feel my hate

i wish you would FEEL how I felt
AND SIT in YOUR place seeing your own HEART melt

the things i feel about you are THREE things
HATE
DESPISE
AND ANGER

I HAVE ONLY ONE THING TO TELL YOU

DEAR YOU ...
I HATE YOU

tupacs_wifey · Aug 10, 2006, 08:08 AM

wo its deep you may have some anger issues there lol just kiddin itz cool

Sarlinari · Aug 10, 2006, 08:09 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by powerxxx

AND I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS ENDED TODAY
becuase i WASN'T envited to it anyway

That's kinda a rip off of Marilyn Manson's (S)aint lyrics isn't it?

"I don't care if your world is ending today
Because I wasn't invited to it anyway"

Quote:

Originally Posted by powerxxx

as far as now
i already KNOW
HOW MUCH I HATE YOU NOW

Erm, that stanza doesn't make a whole lot of sense, you should have worded it better.

The structure of the whole poem is abit, all over the place, but the poem itself is very good, although you may wanna double check the poem.

Lost_Love · Aug 10, 2006, 10:21 AM

is verry how you say...touching...verry...goood...lovley in fact.
hate is verry stong...an verry strong word..also
YAY I LIKED IT LOTS....but not enough....-._-
JUST KIDDING! i really liked it...and i am really confused...hmmmm....

*princesslady* · Aug 10, 2006, 10:30 AM

nice. and deep.*snaps for you*

forever a dreamer · Aug 10, 2006, 10:51 AM

i really liked it, it had a wonderful exprssion of feeling- good poem, keep it up

*ketaro* · Aug 11, 2006, 07:48 AM

it was a pretty kool poem powerxx, but in some stanzas didn't rhymed at all, or was it maybe because this poem is a free verse one.

tupacs_wifey · Aug 11, 2006, 07:52 AM

your poems is nice it holds alot of anger and i like that

N!tr0-Glyc3r1n · Aug 11, 2006, 08:22 AM

very good!!! but in my opinion I like rhymes better but still very good work

HieisLove · Aug 17, 2006, 02:21 PM

Dude!!! I Love It!!!!!!!!!

Aug 10, 2006, 07:53 AM	#1 (permalink)
powerxxx Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: somewhere on this planet Posts: 131 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 310	Dear You DEAR you How ARE you ? HOPE your enjoying YOUR moment because I AM going to turn things over WHATS WRONG ??" you say I'LL tell you it's EVERYTHING ABOUT YOU as far as now i already KNOW HOW MUCH I HATE YOU NOW YOUR FEELINGS huh ,, I DON'T CARE ABOUT THEM whether they're near their destruction or close to their reaction NOW AS I SLAM YOU SHUT I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS CUT AND I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS ENDED TODAY becuase i WASN'T envited to it anyway I WON'T forget UNTILL i make you REGRET you DESERVE that AND YOU deserve more now i could STAND to you BECAUSE i have friends and a person i love i look at my love's beautiful face and her snow white smile that i like to look at once and a while YOU and YOUR deeds DO NOT deserve anything like that. EVEN IF IT WAS ONE OF YOUR NEEDS i wish you feel pain and feel my hate i wish you would FEEL how I felt AND SIT in YOUR place seeing your own HEART melt the things i feel about you are THREE things HATE DESPISE AND ANGER I HAVE ONLY ONE THING TO TELL YOU DEAR YOU ... I HATE YOU __________________ Power -xxx- aka -M.Ali I Fly Swiftly through the air I Spread My Wings Without A trace
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tupacs_wifey Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: In My own heart Posts: 441 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 697	Re: Dear You wo its deep you may have some anger issues there lol just kiddin itz cool __________________ HolderOfTheDarkChalice's LiL sis
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Lost_Love Newbie Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: I don't live anywhere, the only place I can stay safe in is the head atop my shoulders Posts: 79 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 110	Re: Dear You is verry how you say...touching...verry...goood...lovley in fact. hate is verry stong...an verry strong word..also YAY I LIKED IT LOTS....but not enough....-._- JUST KIDDING! i really liked it...and i am really confused...hmmmm.... __________________ there are no raindrops on roses but there are still tears in my eyes...
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ketaro kitty Join Date: Apr 2005 Posts: 4,221 Thanks: 27 Thanked 31 Times in 29 Posts Credits: 23,188	Re: Dear You it was a pretty kool poem powerxx, but in some stanzas didn't rhymed at all, or was it maybe because this poem is a free verse one.
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N!tr0-Glyc3r1n Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: where ur not Posts: 290 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 403	Re: Dear You very good!!! but in my opinion I like rhymes better but still very good work __________________ thank u SasuraiHell go -=NOOBZ=- clan!
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