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    Dear You

    DEAR you
    How ARE you ?

    HOPE your enjoying YOUR moment
    because I AM going to turn things over

    WHATS WRONG ??" you say
    I'LL tell you
    it's EVERYTHING ABOUT YOU

    as far as now
    i already KNOW
    HOW MUCH I HATE YOU NOW

    YOUR FEELINGS
    huh ,, I DON'T CARE ABOUT THEM
    whether they're near their destruction
    or close to their reaction

    NOW
    AS I SLAM YOU SHUT
    I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS CUT

    AND I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS ENDED TODAY
    becuase i WASN'T envited to it anyway

    I WON'T forget
    UNTILL i make you REGRET

    you DESERVE that
    AND YOU deserve more

    now i could STAND to you
    BECAUSE i have friends
    and a person i love

    i look at my love's beautiful face
    and her snow white smile
    that i like to look at once and a while

    YOU and YOUR deeds
    DO NOT deserve anything like that. EVEN IF IT WAS ONE OF YOUR NEEDS

    i wish you feel pain
    and feel my hate

    i wish you would FEEL how I felt
    AND SIT in YOUR place seeing your own HEART melt

    the things i feel about you are THREE things
    HATE
    DESPISE
    AND ANGER

    I HAVE ONLY ONE THING TO TELL YOU

    DEAR YOU ...
    I HATE YOU
    Power -xxx- aka -M.Ali
    I Fly Swiftly through the air
    I Spread My Wings Without A trace

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    Re: Dear You

    wo its deep you may have some anger issues there lol just kiddin itz cool

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    Re: Dear You

    Quote Originally Posted by powerxxx View Post
    AND I DON'T CARE IF YOUR LIFE WAS ENDED TODAY
    becuase i WASN'T envited to it anyway
    That's kinda a rip off of Marilyn Manson's (S)aint lyrics isn't it?

    "I don't care if your world is ending today
    Because I wasn't invited to it anyway
    "
    Quote Originally Posted by powerxxx View Post
    as far as now
    i already KNOW
    HOW MUCH I HATE YOU NOW
    Erm, that stanza doesn't make a whole lot of sense, you should have worded it better.

    The structure of the whole poem is abit, all over the place, but the poem itself is very good, although you may wanna double check the poem.

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    Re: Dear You

    is verry how you say...touching...verry...goood...lovley in fact.
    hate is verry stong...an verry strong word..also
    YAY I LIKED IT LOTS....but not enough....-._-
    JUST KIDDING! i really liked it...and i am really confused...hmmmm....
    there are no raindrops on roses but there are still tears in my eyes...

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    Re: Dear You

    nice. and deep.*snaps for you*

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    Re: Dear You

    i really liked it, it had a wonderful exprssion of feeling- good poem, keep it up
    You laugh at me because I'm different. I laugh at you because your all the same.

    Thanks Hieislove for the siggy!

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    Re: Dear You

    it was a pretty kool poem powerxx, but in some stanzas didn't rhymed at all, or was it maybe because this poem is a free verse one.

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    Re: Dear You

    your poems is nice it holds alot of anger and i like that

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