Thread: Death

Okay, well here's my analysis.

Spelling and Grammar.. Just one or two mistakes. Not too bad there.

As for flow, well it was flowing quite well, but do to the short-ness it made of of these things as I read it. 3--3--1.. If you could have expanded your ideas, maybe add some metaphors or just crazy canvas fighting then you could have gotten and actual beat.

But I see that you get your point across.

Originally Posted by Tetsanosuke Kirikami

Okay, well here's my analysis.

Spelling and Grammar.. Just one or two mistakes. Not too bad there.

As for flow, well it was flowing quite well, but do to the short-ness it made of of these things as I read it. 3--3--1.. If you could have expanded your ideas, maybe add some metaphors or just crazy canvas fighting then you could have gotten and actual beat.

But I see that you get your point across.

few words and a vivid discription is all most people can think of when discriping the grim reaper himself but I appreciate you commentary I shall surely work on that

I like the rhyming, but I can agree with Tetsanosuke about pretty much most of what he already covered.

There weren't TOO many grammatical errors, but enough to disrupt the flow (example: syth is spelled 'scythe'). Your sentence structure was okay, just not as ominous as I had hoped a poem of death to be. Still a worthy attempt though. Kudos for the effort. ^_^

awsome poemits very intresting since i welcom him it was indeed reaper worth meaning keep it up i want to hear more

I'm not the best of speller but I do try to spell as much as I can correctly and I'm glad that you all enjoy my poetry so thanks!

Originally Posted by May_Bloodrose_Pagan

I'm not the best of speller but I do try to spell as much as I can correctly and I'm glad that you all enjoy my poetry so thanks!

words have little meaning, it is not the words themselves but the meaning behind them that matters

Originally Posted by Anton

words have little meaning, it is not the words themselves but the meaning behind them that matters

Words can have many a meaning or barely any at all unless grouped with other words. You can't deny that when a word is chained and weaved with others, it's most inner direct meaning can be fulfilled, and not just by a single thought, but my a brilliant image of brightness, beauty, darkness, despair, lust and all those feelings, like painting on the blank canvas that is your ideas and mixing colors which give life to your meaning.

Quote from a poet I respect from AF; 'Luzy' ( Luzifer )

"... Poetry is not merely just spiritual masturbation! "