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    Decieved.

    It hurts to pretend....
    To pretend
    That I don't see you,
    That I don't want you,
    That I don't know who you are,
    Pretending in hope that you won't leave a scar.
    Too late.
    Those damned scars I hate.
    Even more so the fact that they are unapparent.
    There is a noise so shrill,
    and that is my heart
    paying the bill
    for your stupidity.
    For your hateful conductivity.
    For your pity.
    For your sanity.
    My insanity.
    My dignity.
    Left in the wake of your con.
    You never really loved me.
    You loved the things I did for you and your spiteful glee.
    You loved my love,
    which I gave to you without a glove.
    Not me!
    You didn’t love me.
    You loved the things that you got from saying you love me.
    It's still hard to pretend you don't exist.
    Even if I am pissed,
    You do exist,
    And you can't even begin to imagine how much I reminisce,
    About how much I believed
    How much I couldn't believe
    That you would deceive
    The one you said you would never forget
    But the future is set,
    And I guess I’m a memory.

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    Re: Decieved.

    wow wow ...ect ...
    how much love you have ?that 's very deeply and very nice i love it .....
    keep up .....nice poem ...

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    Re: Decieved.

    very cool poem rave those who deceive are always the ones that
    never get that love they search for or need , this poem just really
    explores that touchy place that seems to always hurt more than
    anything , then you blame them like everyone does when things
    seem to feel so wrong , people have been doing this for god knows how
    long.

    the poem was great and you really worrded this well i like it alot
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Decieved.

    awww rave omg thats soo sad is that really how u feel ??

    but still 10/10 k

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    Re: Decieved.

    well rave i dont think words describe that poem but i will say certainly better than mine thats for sure

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    Re: Decieved.

    OMG!!!!!! So much feelings in this one poem!!!! How sad and amazing this poem is!!! It's just so awesome!!! I hope to see more!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: Decieved.

    this poem is wonderful,I can really feel the emotion that flows through this poem.cant wait for your next one!
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    Re: Decieved.

    Thank you ver much guys ^_^ It sort of just came to me. I didn't want it to be a very gloomy and shadowy poem >_<

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