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    Demise

    Okay this is a poem I just made, about someone who's dying.

    War, death, gloom everywhere,
    The stench of blood filling the air,

    The sight of defeat seems to come near,
    I sit in a corner, armed, praying for my life

    I can see the writing on the wall,
    Everything I dreamed for, is going to fall,

    Why God? Why? I followed your steps ...
    Where have they escorted me?

    Now I follow my fate,
    Leading me to near oblivion ...

    Yup it's in a war. Its kind of dark.

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    Re: Demise

    Rave.................. this is very dark.
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    Re: Demise

    Yeah I know, it's related to something recent. Anyways, any more comments

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    Re: Demise

    I really liked it. I love dark poetry.

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    Re: Demise

    Wow,that's really kool Ravey. I liked it alot
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    Re: Demise

    Very dark. Have you been watching war movies or M*A*S*H recently?

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    Re: Demise

    hi!!!
    nice dark poem...
    i like it ^_^

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    Re: Demise

    Woah, this rates with the poems wrote during WWII. This is dark yet gd. Keep it up.

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