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    Desire

    Twisting and turning
    we're both yearning
    I gotta have you
    you know that's true

    Clawing and scratching
    You're aura is catching
    It's you that I want
    You that I saught

    Hugging and kissing
    It was you I was missing
    So here you are
    lying in my arms

    Pawing and stripping
    Off they come in ripping
    Your touch taking me higher
    Quenching my fiery desire
    Last edited by Sashacat; Feb 05, 2007 at 12:34 PM.

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    Re: Desire

    That is a good poem. It had alot of passion in it. Good job and I look forward to reading more.
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    Re: Desire

    "One kiss is like hot fire
    more is what I desire"

    Those two verses felt out of place where they were. Perhaps somewhere near the end?

    Nice use of rhymes.
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    Re: Desire

    Nice usage of rhyme scheme and a very steamy passionate poem as well! Keep up the good work Sashacat!

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    Re: Desire

    Quote Originally Posted by Kasai View Post
    "One kiss is like hot fire
    more is what I desire"

    Those two verses felt out of place where they were. Perhaps somewhere near the end?

    Nice use of rhymes.
    Yeah, it did seem outta place...changed it up a bit. Hope it fits now ^^

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