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    A different line poem

    s(e
    mp
    tyn
    ess
    of
    the
    sou
    l)
    ad
    ness

    You will get this one if you read it correctly! It is based off something I am studying in English.


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    Re: A different line poem

    Interesting style; reminds me of e.e. cummings. You do have to be careful with this kind of writing, though, as going overboard with the word separation could make it nearly impossible to read. But you've done well in keeping it short and understandable.
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    Re: A different line poem

    >.< wasnt sure what I was looking at at first
    never seen someone write like that before
    but I got it and now when I look at it I cant see it any other way
    its cool I like this >.<
    the message is very simple
    but it relays a whole load of emotions and feeling
    so good job

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    Re: A different line poem

    Quote Originally Posted by gren View Post
    Interesting style; reminds me of e.e. cummings. You do have to be careful with this kind of writing, though, as going overboard with the word separation could make it nearly impossible to read. But you've done well in keeping it short and understandable.
    Aye, I'd like to see what else you can come up with using this style.
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    Re: A different line poem

    De Ja Vu again... I can aswear I saw this poem in the past... the same words on the same font.. But it couldn't be... Hmmm...
    Ok whatever about that, I really like how you've done this, it's really interesting and will make you to look and think and create an opinion! Also it's great that you've been able to put such a deep thought in so little words...

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    Re: A different line poem

    What an awesome style! Seriously. I like this poem a lot!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: A different line poem

    Nice one, Mattness. Style is interesting, and I like the way you wrote the 'definition' inside of the actual word. Very creative.

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    Re: A different line poem

    I second the motion from the above post. It also is a deep meaning of sadness, which hits the marker. I hope I get to read more of your works.
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