A different line poem

Mattness · Apr 25, 2007, 09:34 AM

s(e
mp
tyn
ess
of
the
sou
l)
ad
ness

You will get this one if you read it correctly! It is based off something I am studying in English.

gren · Apr 25, 2007, 10:03 AM

Interesting style; reminds me of e.e. cummings. You do have to be careful with this kind of writing, though, as going overboard with the word separation could make it nearly impossible to read. But you've done well in keeping it short and understandable.

KimiFemi · Apr 25, 2007, 11:46 AM

>.< wasnt sure what I was looking at at first
never seen someone write like that before
but I got it and now when I look at it I cant see it any other way
its cool I like this >.<
the message is very simple
but it relays a whole load of emotions and feeling
so good job

*Kasai* · Apr 25, 2007, 12:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by gren

Interesting style; reminds me of e.e. cummings. You do have to be careful with this kind of writing, though, as going overboard with the word separation could make it nearly impossible to read. But you've done well in keeping it short and understandable.

Aye, I'd like to see what else you can come up with using this style.

*Lasura* · Apr 25, 2007, 12:28 PM

De Ja Vu again... I can aswear I saw this poem in the past... the same words on the same font.. But it couldn't be... Hmmm...
Ok whatever about that, I really like how you've done this, it's really interesting and will make you to look and think and create an opinion!

Also it's great that you've been able to put such a deep thought in so little words...

KuwiRules145 · Apr 25, 2007, 12:29 PM

What an awesome style! Seriously. I like this poem a lot!

!The White Wolf · Apr 25, 2007, 06:11 PM

Nice one, Mattness. Style is interesting, and I like the way you wrote the 'definition' inside of the actual word. Very creative.

Lady Asphyxia · Apr 25, 2007, 09:25 PM

I second the motion from the above post. It also is a deep meaning of sadness, which hits the marker. I hope I get to read more of your works.

Sazurii · Apr 25, 2007, 09:42 PM

OH woa duh thats cool. I started at the letters for like 5 minutes probably drooling trying to figure it out. i got it though thats a cool way of writing. pretty short poem. is it really a poem? like a puzzle poem. anyway way cool.

*Rave_Grip* · Apr 25, 2007, 10:52 PM

Two lines... no wait.
Sadness - Emptiness of soul.
Never knew this existed. Nice job I guess ^_^

Mattness · Apr 26, 2007, 11:59 AM

Wow, I love how complicated a 4 word poem can be! I was going to make a longer one later if you guys like this one.

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!The White Wolf Why so serious? Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,580 Thanks: 9 Thanked 12 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 10,073	Re: A different line poem Nice one, Mattness. Style is interesting, and I like the way you wrote the 'definition' inside of the actual word. Very creative.
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