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    Re: Dirty Fantasy...

    @ Shadowxp-Thanks for commenting!! *hugs* Well if you jusy put your mind 2 it i'm sure that you could write something amamzing.As long as it comes from the heart it can never be wrong.

    @ Raimann-Thanks for the really awesome and funny comment!! *hugs*

    @ Koga23-Thank you soooo very much Koga!!! *hugs* I'm glad that you liked it. Yeah it is pretty new huh lol.I'm even thinking about writting more like this lol. Thanks again.
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    Wow...this certainly is different from what you normally do. But it's still good. Very vivid. Keep it up, it's very interesting and exciting for me to watch your writing style mature.

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    Thank you soooooooo very much Wolf!! *hugs* Yeah it is alot different huh lol.I just felt like writtin somethin new I guess lol. Thanks again!! *hugs*
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    Re: Dirty Fantasy...

    Quote Originally Posted by Shinigami's_Angel View Post
    Dirty Fantasy...

    Touch me, Feel me up
    Spread me out, Open me up wide
    Touch me here and there, Make me feel good inside
    Make me feel alive, Set me aflame...

    "Touch me and bring me to life"

    Whisper in my ear, All of your dirty fantasy's
    Tell me what you need, What you'd like to do to me
    Let's begin the dance, In the void of fantasy
    Take me to a place, Where I never want to leave...

    "Take me to your fantasy"

    I love watching you talk, It's so fascianting
    Love the feel of your hands, Your fingertips on my skin
    Your mouth on mine, And all over my body
    Touch and speak to me dirtly, Let's live your fantasy...

    "Let's live out your dirty fantasy"

    Take away the lonelyness, And make me whole
    Hold me in your arms, Till the night has faded into day
    Kiss away my tears, Kiss away the pain
    Take me to a place where I can forget, Somewhere where I can be with you...

    "Just you and me"

    Bathed in the sliver moonlight, On pure white sheets
    This is where it will take place, Let the fantasy begin
    Loving touches, Sweet and soft spoken words
    This is it, I'm giving all of myself to you and only you...

    "Giving you my everything"

    A heated touch, Passion begins to take control
    You take ahold of me, Kissing me softly and whispering your love for me
    Lay me back and take it slow, A pace that begin's to drive me crazy
    I'm heated with desire and I feel like i'm on fire, Your touch set's me aflame and I can feel your desire for me as well...

    "I can feel your loving desire for me"

    Touch me, Feel me up
    Spread me out, Open me up wide
    Touch me here and there, Make me feel good inside
    Make me feel alive, Set me aflame...

    "Touch me and bring me to life, Show me how to feel alive"

    Whisper in my ear, All of your dirty fantasy's
    Tell me what you need, What you'd like to do to me
    Let's begin the dance, In the void of fantasy
    Take me to a place, Where I never want to leave...

    "Take me to your fantasy, Show me all that you wanna do to me"

    Take away the lonelyness, And make me whole
    Hold me in your arms, Till the night has faded into day
    Kiss away my tears, Kiss away the pain
    Take me to a place where I can forget, Somewhere where I can be with you...

    "Just you and me, Somewhere far away"

    Kiss me deeply, Show me your desire
    Take me into your arms, And never let go of me not even at the end
    Touch those forbidden places and make me burn, This is what we were both wishing for
    This is your dirty fantasy, And now it's mine as well...

    "Our very own dirty fantasy"



    This is some lyrics that I wrote cause I was bored and a good song inspired me lol.Hope that you all enjoyed it!!
    Its always good to try new things, but avoid the cliche. You used alot of detail that has been used time and time again. Make it your own. Describe things in your own words. And then you will have a perfectly awesome piece.

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    Re: Dirty Fantasy...

    Well in all truth these are my own words.And I don't care if stuff like this has been used time and time again,this is my own work and my alone.And I don't care if it's "cliche".Everyone else didn't seem 2 have a problem with it.Anyway thanks for your...well I don't know what really.You have really dissed my work.I know that my lyrics are awesome and so do my friends.So that's all I really care about.
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    Re: Dirty Fantasy...

    Its called critique my dear. And if you can't handle what people "think". Like you asked. Than you shouldnt post it. U need to learn how to except feedback whether its good or bad. It wasnt a diss, it was what you could fix. And if it is someone else's imagery, then its plagerism. It isnt yours, thats why i said to describe it like your own. I know you could make this more intense, if you critiqued it more. Dont insult my opinion again, just dont ask for it.

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