im sitting at the graveyard
everyday there i stay
watching as the lifeless bodies
in the dug up earth decay
no boy understands why
i always want to stay
no body understands why
along the gates i stray
they ask me if the smell
makes my nose start to hurt
i simply reply that it is only when
mornings light shines when i fell discomfort
Wow!!!! This is great!!!!!!!! I really, really like this!!!!!! Nice work!!!!!!!!! Great... it's so dark... and it represents the way people act perfectly... people are scared of what they cannot understand...
And the descriptions perfectly create the dark aura... nice work!!!
I' m waiting forward for your next poem!!!!!!! ^^
wow thanks i didnt expect anyone to like it that much it took me like 5 minutes to write but thanks again
Doesn't matter how long it took, matters if it's good. Anyways, it's good. Gives out a dark feeling to it. Nice mood. Good job. :thumb:
thanks chaos i dont know what else to say:confused:
morbid. I like it when people mention smells in poetry. That provides such a keen sense of imagery... (or smellgery)... yeah I just made up a word!
Anyway, I think this is good. Keep it up!