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    Do you know me?

    Do you really?
    Can you look inside my soul and see my inner most desires?
    Can you look in my eyes and see the very pits of me?
    Can you?

    Do you know that I am one who is sweet when needed
    But evil when wanted.

    Do you know that I can pull you into my thread of deceit
    My web of lies
    My hole of darkness?

    Do you really know me?

    When one sees me, they see sweet sugar drizzled with the essence of innocence.
    They would never suspect that underneath the sugary coating lies a demon
    A demon that is fatal to anyone that crosses its path.

    Do you know me?

    I have red eyes the color of flame
    A heart colder that ice
    The spirt of the devil
    The soul of a killer

    Do you know me?

    My advice to ones who don't know me
    is to stay away from me.
    Dont push me
    Dont test me
    Dont go beyond my limit.

    You don't know me

    I play the game you play but by different rules.
    I will make you cry
    Make you scream
    Make you wish you never met a demon like me

    So.....do you know me?

    Born to rule, raised to lead, taught to establish: The African Queen

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    Re: Do you know me?

    Wow, while reading this, I noticed that your writing in this poem is kinda similar to bratilng's works (well, a few). For example:

    When one sees me, they see sweet sugar drizzled with the essence of innocence.
    They would never suspect that underneath the sugary coating lies a demon
    A demon that is fatal to anyone that crosses its path.
    I was intrigued by this poem. This is very interesting. I like this one. Good job and kudos!


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    Re: Do you know me?

    "Do you know that I am one who is sweet when needed
    But evil when wanted."
    Wow. As soon as I read this I felt like I was writing this, or the speaker! I like this one a lot, and NOT just because you sound like me.
    I like the way this flows, and I like a lot of your wording.

    Wow... Just wow.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Do you know me?

    thanks. This is just another side of this sweet little angel! ^_^
    Just a warning to those who test me

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    Re: Do you know me?

    Nice one there. I liked the whole thing. reminds me a little of how i use to be.

    The poem flowed pretty nicely, and I liked how it was showing the sweet coating with the devious inside. Nicely done.

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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