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    Do you love me?

    If I need your affection. And you're hugging someone else...
    Do you love me?

    If I fall, and your not there to pick me up.
    Do you love me?

    If you could wake up to my face, but you'd rather awake to another.
    Do you love me?

    If you could give me light, But you're willing to let me sit in darkness.
    Do you love me?

    If I stare blankly at the door. Not knowing what Im waiting for.
    If in picture I see your face, but my memory can't seem to trace.
    If my tummy roars and growls, and your pennies go to a different cause..

    How can you say you love me?
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Do you love me?

    Hmmm... a poem witch words can't describe... really sad, really angry and strong... so strong... In this one you prove to be very strong and in the place of that guy- I would be really scared... unless he's a hearless monster...

    I really find this a great work!!! Again... when I read the naming, I thought of another love poem, but since it was written by you... anyways, I'm really glad I read this, because this is simply great... nice work! I'll be waiting for more...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Do you love me?

    yeah im with lasura i cant even put this poem into words its romantic funny sad strong hatefull all in one poem best work yet peaches

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    Re: Do you love me?

    @ Lasura.... Since it was written by me?... Wha? OK... Just for that, Im going to write the sappiest love poem ever!!!

    @ Halo... I love watching people play halo. I'm no good at it though. Anyway, you really think this is one of my best? Im super flattered! Thank you!

    This poem was written from a childs prespective.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Do you love me?

    I didn't see it as a child's perspective...more of a lover's perspective. I felt like if there was someone who saw her lover cheat and not take care of the one that person supposedly loves.

    It's somewhat agressive and accusative, even if it may be true the things that are described. I think the words placed together are provocative and have deep emotions within them.

    out of subject: POTM is active for this month so I hope to see an entry from you there. I'm expecting great things this time as it's freestyle all the way with an open theme
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    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    @ Lasura.... Since it was written by me?... Wha? OK... Just for that, Im going to write the sappiest love poem ever!!!
    No god! Don't!!! I just know that you don't write banal love poems and I find it good- if you write a happy poem it has some sence...

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    Re: Do you love me?

    After reading this poem... i kinda relate to myself...
    Back to subject: This poem for me is good and it the words used can pinch a reader's heart. Sadness... hopelessness...loneliness... and blame. Keep up the good job, Peach_follows.

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: Do you love me?

    Really,I think it is a well-written poem.
    I agree with Soldat of life,it's more like a lover's perspective than a child's.Which is also good however you look at it.
    Overall this expresses alot of good feelings to it,it's well written in my opinion^^

    Become a wind, unfathomable distress. I'll hold back your loneliness.

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