do you rember?

Angel_in_hell · Mar 17, 2007, 10:19 PM

do you rember me
do you rember us
do you rember my touch, my kisses...
do you miss me
or even think of me,
do you want me,
or even love me,
have i been replaced,
or am i still in your heart,
what do i need to do,
to win you back,
i can't go on,
if you dont rember me!

it's not the best but i just broke up with my bf when i wrote it!

CherryBlossom18 · Mar 18, 2007, 01:52 AM

I have felt like this when I broke up with my last boyfriend. I was so sad and lonely for a long time. I am now back together with him and I feel so fortunate to have be so lucky. I'm sorry to hear you and you boyfriend breaking up. I hope you get back together cause it sounds like you really love him.

Angel_in_hell · Mar 18, 2007, 09:45 PM

ya i do! but he lives over a 1000 miles away! the reason we broke up is because i moved! but i still love him and i really miss him!

KimiFemi · Mar 18, 2007, 11:27 PM

oooooh that so sad angel!
I've felt like that before too
I hate it
but the poem is good
the repitition really makes it stick

*Rave_Grip* · Mar 18, 2007, 11:44 PM

Another heart broken poem... silly reason though, no offence. I like it, short but you made your point

Angel_in_hell · Mar 19, 2007, 09:53 PM

lol thanks! i never really write poems! so ya! but i dont think that it was a silly reason! normally whn u are dad you can write ur best! at least thats how i am!

*Kasai* · Mar 20, 2007, 02:18 AM

You could at least make an effort to capitalize the needed words. It would make the poem much easier to read for those who care to see correct grammar and such.

*RayMe* · Mar 20, 2007, 02:29 AM

hmm a nice poem ^^ but like kasai said.. hehe spellings and grammar

Lotski · Mar 20, 2007, 06:58 AM

ouch! i wonder how a human heart can take too much pain...
Move on kid... about the poem, its alright..
try to add emotions on the words..
something like:
"soft touch"
"warm kisses"
ya know what i mean, it will make the poem alive... somehow..
hehehehe

P.R. Princess · Mar 20, 2007, 04:56 PM

oh I know how it feels kinda.
I just leardned to move on.
But the poem is good.
It shows how you feel and thats what matters most.
Well I can't wait to see more.(^.^)

!The White Wolf · Mar 20, 2007, 07:20 PM

This is an all right poem, angel. I believe it could have been better, but it was all right. Nice job.

Mar 17, 2007, 10:19 PM	#1 (permalink)
Angel_in_hell Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Cali Posts: 164 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	do you rember? do you rember me do you rember us do you rember my touch, my kisses... do you miss me or even think of me, do you want me, or even love me, have i been replaced, or am i still in your heart, what do i need to do, to win you back, i can't go on, if you dont rember me! it's not the best but i just broke up with my bf when i wrote it! __________________ IN THE END IT DOSENT EVEN MATTER
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Mar 18, 2007, 01:52 AM	#2 (permalink)
CherryBlossom18 Heavy Metal Goddess Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: a place where the stars shine as bright as the sun Posts: 578 Thanks: 1 Thanked 16 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 2,336	Re: do you rember? I have felt like this when I broke up with my last boyfriend. I was so sad and lonely for a long time. I am now back together with him and I feel so fortunate to have be so lucky. I'm sorry to hear you and you boyfriend breaking up. I hope you get back together cause it sounds like you really love him. __________________ "Sunset Kisses Along The Beach" Made for me by HolderofTheDarkChalice Thanks so much I love it!
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Mar 18, 2007, 09:45 PM	#3 (permalink)
Angel_in_hell Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Cali Posts: 164 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Re: do you rember? ya i do! but he lives over a 1000 miles away! the reason we broke up is because i moved! but i still love him and i really miss him! __________________ IN THE END IT DOSENT EVEN MATTER
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Mar 18, 2007, 11:27 PM	#4 (permalink)
KimiFemi Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: So many places... I cant remember ... Posts: 476 Thanks: 1 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 4,564	Re: do you rember? oooooh that so sad angel! I've felt like that before too I hate it but the poem is good the repitition really makes it stick __________________ Secret Love "Love everyone unless they dont love you back" http://z13.invisionfree.com/Deaths_d...ex.php?act=idx
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Mar 18, 2007, 11:44 PM	#5 (permalink)
Rave_Grip I hate idiots on AO. Kill Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Life is an illusion. Posts: 2,314 Thanks: 0 Thanked 11 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 14,832	Re: do you rember? Another heart broken poem... silly reason though, no offence. I like it, short but you made your point __________________ Wherever you see, there is always 98% of people who love something; and 2% that don't. I'm pretty sure that not ALL 98% of peeps don't support Lolita or anything. So if you agree, put it in your sig. \| .:~My AO Gallery~:. \| \| .:~The AO Rules~:. \|
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Mar 19, 2007, 09:53 PM	#6 (permalink)
Angel_in_hell Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: Cali Posts: 164 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Re: do you rember? lol thanks! i never really write poems! so ya! but i dont think that it was a silly reason! normally whn u are dad you can write ur best! at least thats how i am! __________________ IN THE END IT DOSENT EVEN MATTER
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Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,490	Re: do you rember? You could at least make an effort to capitalize the needed words. It would make the poem much easier to read for those who care to see correct grammar and such. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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Mar 20, 2007, 02:29 AM	#8 (permalink)
RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Re: do you rember? hmm a nice poem ^^ but like kasai said.. hehe spellings and grammar __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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Mar 20, 2007, 06:58 AM	#9 (permalink)
Lotski Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Baguio City, Philippines Posts: 150 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 358	Re: do you rember? ouch! i wonder how a human heart can take too much pain... Move on kid... about the poem, its alright.. try to add emotions on the words.. something like: "soft touch" "warm kisses" ya know what i mean, it will make the poem alive... somehow.. hehehehe __________________ Be d REASON for someone's happiness, NOT just part of it... Be a PART of someone's sadness, but NOT d reason for it.
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Mar 20, 2007, 04:56 PM	#10 (permalink)
P.R. Princess NalaMidnight Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Virginia Posts: 900 Thanks: 3 Thanked 17 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 14,170	Re: do you rember? oh I know how it feels kinda. I just leardned to move on. But the poem is good. It shows how you feel and thats what matters most. Well I can't wait to see more.(^.^) __________________ ~GUNSLINGER~A7X=MIA~ ~ MYSPACE~AWESOME PLACE TO SAVE~ ~I give my heart and everything to my sailor~
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Mar 20, 2007, 07:20 PM	#11 (permalink)
!The White Wolf Why so serious? Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 2,580 Thanks: 9 Thanked 12 Times in 11 Posts Credits: 10,073	Re: do you rember? This is an all right poem, angel. I believe it could have been better, but it was all right. Nice job.
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