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    Fallen Angel PhoenixSara may be famous one day PhoenixSara's Avatar
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    Don't know

    I don't seem to know what to do
    just to show how much I love you.
    Everytime something comes up
    I seem to be upsetting you more.

    Do i need to yell it from the mountain top?
    Do i need to be where you are right now.
    I am at a loss right now
    I don't know what else to do.

    You make me feel so stupid,
    You make me want to cry.
    Now that you said it's all over
    I think my heart just died.

    I really am at a loss for words,
    My actions don't seem to count.
    My heart is breaking with every word you say
    and my mind is literally blown away.

    Don't know what else i can do
    to show what i really feel for you.
    Wasn't it enough that i stayed away
    When i thought she was your day.

    The only thing i know i can do
    Is stay beside in what ever you decision is
    Will i need to cry all the time
    To show that my heart is true?
    "In your arms is where i will be, I love you till my forever ends."
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    Re: Don't know

    This was really sad and beautiful Phoenix. I really liked the structure of it.

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    Re: Don't know

    I think it is a little repetiive, but overall the poem is very believeable. I actually felt the confusion as I read it.

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