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    Don't Leave Now

    Don't leave me now
    don't let me go
    I'm in love with you
    and you don't even know

    I miss you already
    I cant stand this pain
    don't leave me drenched
    in this pouring rain

    don't turn around
    or forget I'm here
    don't leave me empty
    in cold and fear

    I miss you already
    I can't breath without you
    please, don't leave me now
    I'm in love with you

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    Re: Don't Leave Now

    I love rhyming poems!! It makes a nice flow..

    Favourite part:
    I miss you already
    I cant stand this pain
    don't leave me drenched
    in this pouring rain
    I like how you mentioned rain in it, since it symbolises sadness.

    Very good poem! ^^

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Cool Re: Don't Leave Now

    hmm....very nice...although on ur last stanza u used "you" for ur rhyme....other than that it was sweet, short, and to the point....

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