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    Smile Don't Quit(I couldn't think of anything else,so enjoy)

    When things go wrong, as they sometimes will
    When the road you're traveling seems all uphill
    When the funds are low and debts are high
    And you want to smile but you have to sigh
    When care is pressing you down a bit
    Rest if you must but don't you quit.
    Life is queer with its twists and turns,
    As every one of us sometimes learn
    And many a person turns about
    When they might have won, had they stuck it out
    Don't give up though the pace seems slow
    You might succeed with another blow.
    Often the struggler has given up
    When he might have captured the victor's cup
    And he learned too late when the right came down
    How close he was to the golden crown
    Succeed if failure turned inside out
    It's pressing on past fears and doubt
    It's when things seem worse that you mustn't quit!
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    Re: Don't Quit(I couldn't think of anything else,so enjoy)

    I really enjoyed it. I found very little fault with it. You may get better use of your last line if you changed it from "things seem worse" to "things seem worst." Further not: You wrote secceed. That's not a word. I think you meant "Succeed." Otherwise, I really, really liked it.

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    Re: Don't Quit(I couldn't think of anything else,so enjoy)

    That was a very good poem. It motivates you to keep going after your what you want even if you think you'll never get it. Great job and I can't wait to read more.
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    Re: Don't Quit(I couldn't think of anything else,so enjoy)

    Thats such a good poem!!!!!!!!!!!!! I really liked it. (I wish I could ryme with mine) I really liked it. But like divine said just need to find something for the last line. But I really liked it.(^.^)

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