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    Dream

    Dream


    You toss and turn and break a sweat
    Wake up with tears your pillows wet
    You’re drowning in a river of your hopelessness

    If only I could save you now
    There’s got to be some way somehow
    To let you know how I feel inside
    Cause it’s so obvious and hard to hide

    But if you really didn’t care why was I there
    The color of my eyes the scent of my hair
    Now I know dreams aren’t reality
    But it’s so real so real to me

    I can take a dream and tell you that I love you lady
    You couldn’t see that I was always there for you
    Remembering the time we spent together
    Came true to me one night I had a dream

    This is not my usual style of writing but I thought I give something new a try!

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    Re: Dream

    Wow that was an awesome peom, filled with emotion, I like so much i showed much devotion
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    Thank you Shippo101 for you awesome comment and cheerful rhyme! I appreciate you reading my poem!

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    Re: Dream

    It was pretty good, i actually enjoyed reading it.

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    Re: Dream

    That was awesome buddy!! I loved the rhyming in it. ^_^ Nice job. 10/10 lol I don't see anything wrong with this poem either. O btw for this being a first, it was good. ^_^ Your getting better and better!


    Thanks lifeforce! (:

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    anime_being_god: thanks for the awesome comment I truly appreciate it!

    fma1012: Okay sorry about the little buddy comment! And thank you for helping me in my time of need! You and Shini are Awesome!

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    Re: Dream

    Omg!!! I'm speachless.This was really amazing! Truely awesome Fox!!! I sooo loved it!!! Ya know,this could make a really good song.I even started singing it 2 myself while I was reading it lol. Amazing as always Fox!!! Keep up the awesome work!!!
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    Dude that was a pretty kool peom. I like the second stanza the most because you it caught my attention. Nicely well written.

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