Thread: Dream

very awesome poem you really are getting better and i know hoe this feels
and how you put it in to words couldnt have been doone any better , i vcant
wait to read another

HolderofTheDarkChalice-Thanks Bro for you awesome comments, and I appreciate you understanding where I'm coming from in this poem! You know if you ever need me I be there! The poem honestly took me out of my element/normal writing style, but I think I did okay! (not trying to sound arrogant or anything! But thanks for always being there Bro!

not a prob and i always will be no ifs and s or buts
and ths poem really is great dreams are all we have
when it comes to somethings and the poem really
porves that point be it a good dream or a bad dream

thanks Bro and You Rox! Maybe I should try more poems out of my element, who knows it might improve my writing style! If you tend to write about the same thing your poems become pretty dull sometimes ya know?

My my...it is good...almost trance like if you will...
Anyways, its very poetic and I enjoyed reading it very much.
You started out well with the rhyme scheme and all, but towards the end it seems that you pulled it together...I'm not criticizing it but saying that maybe you could rework the last stanza because it will make the poem even better. I truly loved it and I do hope to see more. Kudos!

OH WOW! I LOVE IT!. I really like the third line "You'r drowning in a river of your own hopelessnes". This is a really good poem. Its definatly not bad for a different style.

P.R. Princes: thank you for you awesome comment on my poem! I truly appreciate the encouragement and I also want to thank you for reading! I try to keep more of these different type style poems coming!

silentangel: thank you also for you comments and I will try to rework the last stanza and see if I can make it fit! I truly value your opinion and who know maybe more people will actually read it? Thank you once again! And welcome to AO!