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    Dreaming in Blood


    Restless days in a timeless search,
    the sands slip away to progressive death
    until our time begins anew.

    My punishment for their sins,
    Betrayal! Revolution! Destruction!
    and has cast me away from you.

    Their hatred, their jealousy, their fear
    eats away at my flesh and burns it’s way into my body
    to smother the beating of my heart.

    My only rest, my precious respite
    In our blood-drenched dreams,
    Where you wait for me.

    Become a wind, unfathomable distress. I'll hold back your loneliness.

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    Re: Dreaming in Blood

    that poem is great good choces of words in this i give u 9/10

    it was the colour of text its hard to see.... if it was easyer seen it was totaly a 10/10 mark from me ^^

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    Re: Dreaming in Blood

    I wanted the color to be somewhat "blood-related"
    Well,thank you anyways. In the near future i'll remember to use brighter colors ^^;

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    Re: Dreaming in Blood

    wow... this is good.. i like it very much... very short but it tells what you want to convey.. i can't do that well... i give description to tell what i want mostly

    nicely done

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    Nice,

    I agree with some, The description was excellent , Whoever the writing was hard to read with the dark red colour.

    I liked it because I think from my point of view that it's definitely very unique.


    I'd love to read more of your poems.

    -Zainab

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    Re: Dreaming in Blood

    I really enjoy this poem. I can relate to the sentiment but it was also really well conveyed beautifully written and well worded too. I like this one a -lot-. Thanks for posting it.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Dreaming in Blood

    I think it was quite powerful, i like poems i do them my self. it's short but effective. I had a bit of trouble trying to read the text thought and i can understand why you did that color too.

    Good work!
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