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    Dreams or Reality

    Dreams or Reality

    In a world that's untouchable
    A world that only exists when we close our eyes
    Do we believe what we see and let it choose our way of life?
    If someone came to you in a dream
    Would you leave the one that's alive for someone who's dead?

    A world of splendera world to escape to when needed
    Some where you can hide from a world of hurt and betrayal
    Do we believe what we dream hoping it will come true
    Choosing to live in a dream when you could live in reality
    with the one you love

    Is it really so hard to chose
    Leave the world of dreams behind
    Leave your past in the past
    Face the world head on
    Live it to the fullest

    Deams are not everything
    Although it shows you sometimes your hearts desire
    What if they are not possible
    What should you do?

    Give up and live in your dreams?


    I think it's badly written...what do you guys think?
    Last edited by Ky-lyrra; Feb 26, 2007 at 10:45 AM. Reason: Spelling corrections
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    Re: Dreams or Reality

    I like these types of poems and you did a wonderful job on in it in my personal opinion! The only thing I see wrong with the poem are spelling mistakes. For example:

    "Choosing to live in a dream when you cluld live in reality": change cluld to could.

    In this line "Although it shows you sometmes your hearts desire": change sometmes to sometimes.

    Also correct this line "Leave your past int the past": just change int to in.

    Overall a very good poem and I hope to see more of these from you in the future Ky-lyrra! Keep up the good work!

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    Re: Dreams or Reality

    Thanks Blue I needed that pick me up. I thought I did a crappy job on it but was proven wrong I guess. Another Poem to add to my list.
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    Re: Dreams or Reality

    that really make me think bak..think of my dreams...sigh..
    im wondering now and ask the same question as u did .... ~.~
    wat would happen 2 me in the future... sigh..

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    Re: Dreams or Reality

    No problem Ky-lyrra! I see the potential in you to become one of the best here at AO and I know that one of these days you going to prove me right! Just keep writing alright? I'll be looking for more of your work in the future!

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    Re: Dreams or Reality

    u dident do a crapy job Ky i like it it made me think about my good dreams but not all dreams are good...sigh
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    Re: Dreams or Reality

    Really good poem, Ky-lyrra! Very nice message you're putting out to the public. Should we let our dreams control our reality?? I don't know.... Only if you would edit "excape" in the first line, second stanza >.< Other than that...great poem! I'd like to see more work from you!

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    Re: Dreams or Reality

    it made me think, though i do live in this reality the dreams show my hearts desire. im not with the one i love, in fact im not with anyone. but i know that the dreams are dreams, some are possible while others are not. this poem shows deep emotion, great wording. i hope that you keep this up cause i want to see more.
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