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Reply With QuoteIt's not dumb, I like it quite well (and I usually don't like poetry), it's a little bit strange but has an interesting thought in it... Iagree with you that a pencil is a great weapon, especialy nowadays.Nice work, RayMe!
I am on a live green carpet,
under a big shady tree,
right on top of a small hill.
In my hand is a powerful weapon.
The greatest weapon man ever made.
Sharper than any swords.
Powerful than any mass destruction weapon.
Accurate than any guns.
It has won many battles through propaganda.
It is a weapon that may look harmless.
A weapon that burst out tears,
generates hate,builds anger,drive rage,
but,...
from all the evil i spoken of it,
It also can shine the light of hope.
Carve traces of smile,explodes laughter,
and burns the spirit.
This so called weapon is a pencil.
A weapon so great but it is useless without the god's gift to man,
Imagination.
Title is a pencil... @.@ dumb title xD
Last edited by RayMe; Apr 15, 2007 at 01:31 PM.
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It's not dumb, I like it quite well (and I usually don't like poetry), it's a little bit strange but has an interesting thought in it... Iagree with you that a pencil is a great weapon, especialy nowadays.
Ty.. but it kinda sound dumb to me.. :/ the words in there are too..well simple.. ~.~ i want to enchance my verbs and vocabulary.. hmm.. and making poems are a good way of doing so
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Yes, something is stange in this poem, especialy the second verse, it kind of gets of rhythm, but I know I can't writte anything better and I'm sure it was more interesting than those I have to read at school, so its Ok.
Well... I already fell my vocabulary getting better when chating here, so I bet yoūr vocabulary will get better, though it's good to me.
Thx for the comfort... thats a little more confidence u gave me there..
hmm.. i shall continue writing.. and it's weird i suddenly went to a store and bought a pen and a notebook when i was at work.. and right once i got back to my desk at work.. i started writing this poem xD
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Your welcome... I know how writers need a little support ( I writte stories).
Wow, I LOVED this... I have a huge love for imagination! And pencils as well ^_^
Not dumb by any means... very original topic! It made me smile, probably one of my favorites read on AO.
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xD i think i over exagrated it... *is that the right spelling?xD*
a little too much on the pencil.. xD
and to talk about a pencil is kinda dumb..i'd say.. xD
i tried to make something special and only this come out to me...darn imagination xD
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