+ Reply to Thread
Page 2 of 2 FirstFirst 1 2
Results 9 to 10 of 10

Thread: A dumb poem i made

  1. #9
    Femmebot Rehab Colt Crouse Champion, Bookworm Champion, Hangman Champion, Connect 2 Champion Peach_follows has become well known Peach_follows has become well known Peach_follows has become well known Peach_follows's Avatar
    Join Date
    Apr 2005
    Friendly Fridley
    Thanked 140 Times in 121 Posts

    Re: A dumb poem i made

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    xD i think i over exagrated it... *is that the right spelling?xD*
    a little too much on the pencil.. xD
    and to talk about a pencil is kinda dumb..i'd say.. xD

    i tried to make something special and only this come out to me...darn imagination xD
    No, talking about a pencil, or even exaggerating what a pencil is... isnt DUMB... thats what sepperates the adveradge poem from the super creative poem. Its an idea no one else has.

    The only thing I would change about your poem is that I would not start out with "a pencil..." I would have saved that for last so that you could surprise the reader with it. Otherwise it sort of takes away from the suspense, because right from the begining you already know your elaborating about a pencil. I just think its be better as a surprise ending. But other than that...

    This poem is worthy of publishing (once you did some fine tuned editing)
    ... Not Ever Again...

  2. #10
    Rawr~ :3 Boxteroid Champion, flyplane Champion, Home Run Champion, Bubbelfutsch Champion, Fire Fighter Champion, Brendans Soccer Champion, Movie Star Match-Up Champion, Total blackout Champion, Text Your Reflexes Champion, Scary movie Champion, Hulk Smash Up Champion, Star Wars Champion, Extreme Snowboarding Champion, Air Disc Champion, Action Fish Champion, A Game Of 3 Halves Champion, Battleball Champion, Hacky Sack Champion, FAD 2003 Champion, SQRL Golf Champion, Dr Yeckyl and Mr Ride Champion, Sky Glide Champion, Flyer Champion, Finnair Champion, Drachenjagd Champion, Canyon Glider Champion, City Surfing Champion, Action Driving Game Champion, Extreme Rowing Champion, Kardahdg Champion, Acceleracers Track Mod Champion, Final Test Champion, Du Wichtel Champion, Pedal Power Champion, Camera Killer 2 Champion, Bike Mania on ICE Champion, ATV Winter Challenge Champion, Caliber Dash Champion, Diesel and Death Champion, Snow Ride Champion, Camera Killer Champion, Pepsi Jet Ski Champion, Bumper Cars Championship Champion, Drifting Champion, Get A Grip Champion, Rooney on the Rampage Champion, Death To Ninja Champion, Kung Fu Hustle 2 Champion, Muay Thai Champion, Metal Arm FAWEGE Champion, Knife Champion, Classroom Fighter Champion, Nobuyuki Forces 3 Champion, Caddeva Champion, Sewer Dweller Champion, Angel Mart Champion, Snowy Champion, Bola Champion, Boiler Room Champion, Bobcat Champion, Amazon Quest Champion, Booty Champion, Five Errors Champion, Mind Your Marbles Champion, Angel Fruit Champion, Binggrae Champion, Candy Shoot Champion, Imperial tiles Champion, Himalayaya - Yeti Strikes Back Champion, Terrorist Attack Champion, Americas Army Champion, Special Operations Champion, Destroy the robots Champion, Cubicle Warfare Champion, Battle Field Champion, Weapons Dealer Champion, Army Copter Champion, Flat War Champion, Terrorist Alert Champion, Bully Basher Champion, Reaktor Champion, Bungee Rescue Champion, The Contraptor Champion, Boris Champion, Carling Cold Champion, Paddleball Champion RayMe is making a name for themselves RayMe is making a name for themselves RayMe's Avatar
    Join Date
    Jul 2006
    Not somewhere I love but I am glad I have a home so far
    Thanked 61 Times in 56 Posts

    Re: A dumb poem i made

    so u meant that i need to edit it @.@ ... ok
    good idea.. just like i did with the poem moon.. *wonders* yeah... @.@

    Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!!
    I'm BACK AO!

+ Reply to Thread
Page 2 of 2 FirstFirst 1 2

Similar Threads

  1. Dumb ID
    By Ichigokarate in forum Cyber Lounge
    Replies: 3
    Last Post: Feb 12, 2007, 03:42 PM
  2. Poem I made to get a girl to forgive me
    By Sasuke Is Emo in forum Poems
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: Feb 06, 2007, 07:16 PM
  3. Another of my peoms(poem)made in 7 min
    By Ninrev Sirgem in forum The Thread Vault
    Replies: 2
    Last Post: May 30, 2005, 07:12 AM
  4. dumb question or maybe not :P
    By sedka in forum The Thread Vault
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: Feb 07, 2005, 07:10 AM
  5. Who wants to marry a dumb*ss?
    By narrator in forum The Thread Vault
    Replies: 18
    Last Post: Dec 03, 2004, 07:29 PM


Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts