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    Dusk till' Dawn

    Wandering man, troubled past
    saw the light in a passing glance.
    He met a woman, long brown hair.
    He protects her from great despairs.

    Though they knew it
    they spoke no word.
    Lovers sound they had heard.
    Acts to fight so no one knows.
    Lady grows large, like friends and foes

    As the two raise there spawn.
    Father gets shot, now he's gone.
    Little boy now big and strong,
    protects his mother from dusk till' dawn.
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    Re: Dusk till' Dawn

    Oh that's sweet, and Kind. I like it. My like a family kinda poem. I liked. Keep up the work!
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    Re: Dusk till' Dawn

    Quote Originally Posted by Mr. K
    Oh that's sweet, and Kind. I like it. My like a family kinda poem. I liked. Keep up the work!
    Haha, you mean the "father gets shot" part, Mr K? ^_^;;

    Anyway, the poem is quite good, nice and simple. I know how complicated it is to make a great poem but keeping the rhyme going as well.

    Great job
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    Re: Dusk till' Dawn

    Haha, you mean the "father gets shot" part, Mr K? ^_^;;
    you got her man.

    lol man nice poem it is really kool, keep it up.

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    Heh heh, thanks, I try my best and I'll be working on more soon, this is just some of my older work


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    Re: Dusk till' Dawn

    wait did u post this twice?
    If they really had a desire to live, they would've been more aware of how easy it is to die.

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    Re: Dusk till' Dawn

    That wouldn't happen 2 be a sequel from the othe poem is it? Well either way, its excellent.
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    Nice, like the protection thing u got going on. N it rythms LOL. Tht's gd dude. Keep it up.

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