Eagle spirit

!flaminghate · Jan 26, 2007, 04:23 AM

look into my heart and I see the spirit
of an eagle fly
High it soars
Searching for its place in the universe
But a shot brings it down
an arrow through its soul
Falling it dies I cover my eyes and weep
taking a pen in hand
I write
Thoughts of the eagle as it re-enters my soul
its spirit awakening
My mind
From the dark thoughts that have blinded me
a light begins to glow Dimly at first
It brightens as the pen flies
across the page
The cry of the eagle pen on its tip.

*Kasai* · Jan 26, 2007, 01:30 PM

wow, i like the creativity in this poem. But punctuation would give it a better flow.

JefferyXie · Jan 26, 2007, 04:20 PM

Slightly different to most poems and similar to some that i have read.Yes the creativity is ought to be mentioned as well as the lack of punctuation.Still,it was worth reading.

CherryBlossom18 · Jan 26, 2007, 08:08 PM

I liked your poem. It was really moving. I look forward to reading your next one.

rockroc · Jan 26, 2007, 08:32 PM

I almost leaked a tear, reminds me of the stories my mothers family tells me, i love being a Native American.

!flaminghate · Jan 27, 2007, 05:16 AM

hey,I'm glad you like my poem.hey rockroc I'm glad that you love being a Native American,I'm proud of being a Native

*HolderOfTheDarkChalice* · Jan 27, 2007, 06:15 AM

awesome poem and the spriit of the eagle is
in anyone that just accepts life and understands
what real freedom is ,being a free soul is a pretty
awwesome thing not many have or will experince because
the world has numbed them.

arubberchicken · Jan 27, 2007, 01:33 PM

i thought the poem was really good too and it is a shame that the world has numbed a lot of people... but it makes the people who do understand all that more important

Jan 26, 2007, 04:23 AM	#1 (permalink)
!flaminghate Banned Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Immortal, till I die Posts: 464 Thanks: 4 Thanked 5 Times in 4 Posts Credits: 1,783	Eagle spirit look into my heart and I see the spirit of an eagle fly High it soars Searching for its place in the universe But a shot brings it down an arrow through its soul Falling it dies I cover my eyes and weep taking a pen in hand I write Thoughts of the eagle as it re-enters my soul its spirit awakening My mind From the dark thoughts that have blinded me a light begins to glow Dimly at first It brightens as the pen flies across the page The cry of the eagle pen on its tip.
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Jan 26, 2007, 01:30 PM	#2 (permalink)
Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,490	Re: Eagle spirit wow, i like the creativity in this poem. But punctuation would give it a better flow. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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Jan 26, 2007, 04:20 PM	#3 (permalink)
JefferyXie Shichibukai Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Sydney Posts: 613 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Re: Eagle spirit Slightly different to most poems and similar to some that i have read.Yes the creativity is ought to be mentioned as well as the lack of punctuation.Still,it was worth reading.
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CherryBlossom18 Heavy Metal Goddess Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: a place where the stars shine as bright as the sun Posts: 578 Thanks: 1 Thanked 16 Times in 16 Posts Credits: 2,336	Re: Eagle spirit I liked your poem. It was really moving. I look forward to reading your next one. __________________ "Sunset Kisses Along The Beach" Made for me by HolderofTheDarkChalice Thanks so much I love it!
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rockroc Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Dublin, Georgia Posts: 248 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 296	Re: Eagle spirit I almost leaked a tear, reminds me of the stories my mothers family tells me, i love being a Native American. __________________ Fighting Game Fanatic, I owned Gill and I'll own you next. =D
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!flaminghate Banned Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Immortal, till I die Posts: 464 Thanks: 4 Thanked 5 Times in 4 Posts Credits: 1,783	Re: Eagle spirit hey,I'm glad you like my poem.hey rockroc I'm glad that you love being a Native American,I'm proud of being a Native
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HolderOfTheDarkChalice Tournaments Won: 1 King Of Darkness Join Date: May 2006 Location: someplace where the only light is the moon above Posts: 2,795 Thanks: 21 Thanked 20 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 3,212	Re: Eagle spirit awesome poem and the spriit of the eagle is in anyone that just accepts life and understands what real freedom is ,being a free soul is a pretty awwesome thing not many have or will experince because the world has numbed them.
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arubberchicken Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2007 Location: America Posts: 121 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 210	Re: Eagle spirit i thought the poem was really good too and it is a shame that the world has numbed a lot of people... but it makes the people who do understand all that more important
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