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    Re: Elie26's work

    Really nice poem. I got kinda depressed and dark feeling from it, but when I
    think about it better it sounds really nice.
    Good work as usual elie


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    Nice poem elie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!(keep up the good work!)

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    Re: Elie26's work

    wow that is really impressive.

    but I like the ending alot it was cool hahahaha keep it up

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    Re: Elie26's work

    my newest work-

    R.I.P ( Death of me )

    Fill my heart with hate and sorrow
    Leave me to rot, die and cripple
    Strip me of my pride and dignity
    Tear me into a million pieces

    The trials that I’ve gone through- impossible
    Seize this opportunity to crush me whole
    I’m sick of those sinister smiles
    Your passion is of a dead tree

    Useless tears had been shed and wasted
    Foolish dreams are shattered
    Friends? I have none

    God, now I beg for you to have the slightest mercy on me
    Take what’s left of me and leave no traces
    Open your eyes and you’ll discover
    I was long dead

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    Re: Elie26's work

    nice elie although I hope you dont mean the "no friends" thing very powerful imagery in the poem though the ending seems kind of short like it came to a sudden halt


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    the wish of being dead to free urself of this pain u feel. To see tht this is a cruel joke by God...u want Him to take ur life right now and be free. Such a dark n sad poem elie. Nice one, keep it up.

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    Re: Elie26's work

    Quote Originally Posted by elie26
    i decided on making a thread for ALL my works. tis is one of my newest piece.

    PLZ COMMENT HONESTLY ON ALL WORKS, NO MATTER GOOD OR BAD. ALL COMMENTS AND OPINIONS ARE RESPECTED AND APPRECIATED. Thank you. ^^

    Unwinding the truth of me

    I’m stuck here alone, mesmerized by the outside view
    The sun has finally set, a reflection of my life
    Come forth sky and take me with you
    I live in a world of emptiness and death
    Life of non-ending suffering and pain

    Reality in my eyes is merely a live stage
    Played by the main actors and actresses
    Hoping to get one shine of glamour and fame
    A fake to impress in the eyes of others
    And it shall slowly fade away when the time passes by

    I bear the mark of disgrace in my blood
    The shame I’ve caused is undeniably unforgivable
    I packed my bags and left long ago without my heart
    The figure you see now is nothing but a fragment of who I once was
    My feelings has since then vanished and turned into a all-one emotion of depression

    I’m coming back down, landing on my knees
    I tried to hide and cover, but all I get was loneliness
    I can’t stand the faults, the crimes and sins
    Holding for so long drained me emotionally and physically
    I long for the familiar sounds of care and warmth

    Cry out loud, leaning on your shoulders
    Shedding the skin and revealing what’s really inside me
    A fragile piece of thread, hanging on the other

    The rain has stopped, the wind has calmed
    The nightmares has gone, the clouds has unfold
    Look outside the window…… and live……
    That was deep. I really like your poetry.

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    Re: Elie26's work

    gud elie u imoprove hahaha...but ya i agree wat zakraa say...u r not alone ^_^
    Angel girl~~

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