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    Empty as the night

    In your heart,
    Upon your chest,
    Within your soul.

    You can't escape,
    the pain within.
    I crawls in your ears,
    and out your eyes.
    The pain you hear,
    Its in your lies.

    Its in the night,
    the empty lies
    they hurt the sight
    of the third eyes light

    Your soul is empty
    and your eyes are dark
    Your soul is as plain
    as is your heart...

    Your cries are empty
    and there carried away
    your eyes are empty
    and there blank to anything...

    Your as empty as the night and you are nothing in my third eyes sight...



    This one is weird...and i am sortof scarred by it...cause i don't know what it means... -hides-
    there are no raindrops on roses but there are still tears in my eyes...

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    Re: Empty as the night

    Quote Originally Posted by Lost_Love View Post
    I crawls in your ears
    shouldn't 'I' be 'It'?

    Quote Originally Posted by Lost_Love View Post
    and there carried away
    'there' should be 'they're'

    Quote Originally Posted by Lost_Love View Post
    Your as empty as the night and you are nothing in my third eyes sight...
    'Your' should be 'You're'

    but that is all of the mistakes I see- a good poem, but I don't really understand it...but as you said, neither do you
    You laugh at me because I'm different. I laugh at you because your all the same.

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    Re: Empty as the night

    very morbid poem i love it and describing the pain of an empty
    uncaring person who has no remorse over what they did or
    said becuase they have no cares. almost like somone with
    dark intentions i like where you went with this very awesome
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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