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    An Emptyness Inside of Me

    Sometimes when this place gets kinda empty.
    The sound of their voices fades with the light.
    I feel like I have a different personality
    I don't want to feel lonely tonight
    TO think about the loveless fascination
    To never know what the light really is...I got no time for provate consultation.
    Just blame it all in Wix
    Letting all this lead you here despite your destination
    Snow flakes fallin- so shimmery and white
    As dark as day it;s time for supervision.
    Sharp fangs a nibble here and one quick little bite.
    Blood falling from his neck a glorious sight.
    A tear falls...
    Why should I be crying if I have nothing left inside of me?
    Nothing..A nobody
    No point in life but just to sit here and watch the snow flakes falling gently on our heads.
    This emptyness inside me killing me slowly.
    Watching you sleep brings me joy knowing that your safe right here beside me.
    An Emptyness Insdie of Me
    Slowly killing me away-slowly fading away with the genlte wind.
    I wish a life of a love of a life. Send a light to through the darkest of nights. Let a kiss fly from the heart. Love me like you loved me in our past lives. Send this pain back to me these cold lonely nights. Haunt all my fanasties leave all my dreams shadow yourself once again into me....

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    Re: An Emptyness Inside of Me

    Ok I know this peom doesn't really make any sense at all.
    Trust me once I read it over I kinda lost myself. I had started out with something gentle but then I felt kinda guitly because of something that I'm doing but I don't know whether it's right or wrong....So half way inbewteen the peom and real life I just kinda blanked...I mean I really spaced out...Kinda sad I know maybe I'll just rewrite again and make it better then before.
    So tell me what you think of it and no I won't get mad at aything you say
    ~Momo~
    ~aka riku-chan~
    I wish a life of a love of a life. Send a light to through the darkest of nights. Let a kiss fly from the heart. Love me like you loved me in our past lives. Send this pain back to me these cold lonely nights. Haunt all my fanasties leave all my dreams shadow yourself once again into me....

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    Re: An Emptyness Inside of Me

    Poetry doesnt have to make sense to be beautiful. I thought this was one of your better writing's.
    Dont touch this... don't rewrite it. I wouldn't change a thing.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: An Emptyness Inside of Me

    Quote Originally Posted by rikus demonic lover View Post
    Ok I know this peom doesn't really make any sense at all.
    Trust me once I read it over I kinda lost myself. I had started out with something gentle but then I felt kinda guitly because of something that I'm doing but I don't know whether it's right or wrong....So half way inbewteen the peom and real life I just kinda blanked...I mean I really spaced out...Kinda sad I know maybe I'll just rewrite again and make it better then before.
    So tell me what you think of it and no I won't get mad at aything you say
    ~Momo~
    ~aka riku-chan~
    I liked your poem. It was really good. Kinda on the dark side, but good. You did well. ^_^

    You know "Momo" is Japanese for "Peach" right? Just thought I'd throw that in there. ^_^


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    Re: An Emptyness Inside of Me

    Lol that's cool to know. I actually did not know that my friend just gave me the name because Momo from...Uh I think from Bleach..He said I kinda reminded him of Momo so he gave the nickname Momo. Kinda funny actually.Thanks again for the comment!
    I wish a life of a love of a life. Send a light to through the darkest of nights. Let a kiss fly from the heart. Love me like you loved me in our past lives. Send this pain back to me these cold lonely nights. Haunt all my fanasties leave all my dreams shadow yourself once again into me....

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    Re: An Emptyness Inside of Me

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    Poetry doesnt have to make sense to be beautiful. I thought this was one of your better writing's.
    Dont touch this... don't rewrite it. I wouldn't change a thing.
    Thank you very much your means very much to me!
    I wish a life of a love of a life. Send a light to through the darkest of nights. Let a kiss fly from the heart. Love me like you loved me in our past lives. Send this pain back to me these cold lonely nights. Haunt all my fanasties leave all my dreams shadow yourself once again into me....

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