To the End of the light

It was a dream.

I was standing next to you
In the low set light
I was standing next to you
And noticed you frozen in fright.

I took a step,
And you folowed
I leaped into the dark
and became swallowed

On the other side
I saw an unworthy light
On the other side
I felt as if i died

There was no pulse
there was no blood
there was no warmth
And there was no love.

I took a step and you were there
I took a step and you wern't there

You were a ghost in the end
As I walked tword the light
You were a ghost in the end
And I froze in fright

At the end
there was something
At the end...

It was all a dream

i really like your peom..its very interesting. I never thought that by the time i finished your poem..u wrote in the end it was all a dream..alotta rhymes too =D keep up the good work..

Woot! Your descriptions were right on the dot! I could imagine the entire poem. I feel as though you can elaborate just a little more.

Kudos for you!! ^-^ You wrote a great poem. In some parts it rhymes which i liked very much. As i was reading, i was able to visualize the scene. ^^

These lines really impressed me:

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Originally Posted by Lost_Love

On the other side
I saw an unworthy light
On the other side
I felt as if i died

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Nice poem man, i would give you 10 out of 10.

I bet ketaro!!!j/k i give 20 out of 10

Nice one, very descriptive
like the ending the best