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    To the End of the light

    It was a dream.

    I was standing next to you
    In the low set light
    I was standing next to you
    And noticed you frozen in fright.

    I took a step,
    And you folowed
    I leaped into the dark
    and became swallowed

    On the other side
    I saw an unworthy light
    On the other side
    I felt as if i died

    There was no pulse
    there was no blood
    there was no warmth
    And there was no love.

    I took a step and you were there
    I took a step and you wern't there

    You were a ghost in the end
    As I walked tword the light
    You were a ghost in the end
    And I froze in fright

    At the end
    there was something
    At the end...

    It was all a dream

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    Re: To the End of the light

    i really like your peom..its very interesting. I never thought that by the time i finished your poem..u wrote in the end it was all a dream..alotta rhymes too =D keep up the good work..

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    Re: To the End of the light

    Woot! Your descriptions were right on the dot! I could imagine the entire poem. I feel as though you can elaborate just a little more.
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    Re: To the End of the light

    Kudos for you!! ^-^ You wrote a great poem. In some parts it rhymes which i liked very much. As i was reading, i was able to visualize the scene. ^^

    These lines really impressed me:

    Quote Originally Posted by Lost_Love
    On the other side
    I saw an unworthy light
    On the other side
    I felt as if i died

    ! Rescue me from this loneliness !

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    Re: To the End of the light

    Nice poem man, i would give you 10 out of 10.

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    I bet ketaro!!!j/k i give 20 out of 10


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    Re: To the End of the light

    Nice one, very descriptive
    like the ending the best
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