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    "enemy"

    An enemy is part of me it lurks behind
    Me sinking into me waiting for,
    Me to fall into its gloom and misery,
    But i shake away my enemy ,
    The one who puts me down.

    I shake it away but it always stays with me
    I have seen other peoples enemies lurking around,
    Me trying to fight back at me but I push them away,
    I am almost immortal to enemies.

    But sometimes they trip me,
    They get to my head they wound me but I soon recover,
    bring it on enemies,
    I am not scared!!

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    Re: "enemy"

    i liked it all except this line
    I am almost immortal to enemies.
    you just over did trying to give a feal for the scene.
    i would of said in something like this
    endless life unfortunate for my enemies.

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    Re: "enemy"

    Great poem. It reminded me of how I struggle daily with my enemies... including myself.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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