KuwiRules145

Eternal

There you are, my daylight star
Trying to reach yet your too far
Sprouting wings flowing free
Why won't you come and save me?

Eyes of pure
That are truly your
Continue to sing to me
As it set me free

Love like ours
Are like a precious flower
That grow so endlessly
And look so dearly

Heart so touch
Emotion grow so much
Start to beat so rapidly
But still becomes so deadly

Goodbye to all
Causes tears to fall
Dividing each love apart
That destroys a heart

So here we are again
So loved since then
Becoming more than friends
That will never end

That every touch of our long infernal
Makes our love only last so Eternal

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Yah.... Well I didn't know what to put for the title so sorry
and the poem not so good so sorry... heheheee... ^^

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animechick

i liked this. it had a nice simple flow to it and then the ending was different which gave it an unexpected turn. i liked it to the end!

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!Akura13

wow, that was one part I can relate to lol but anyways, I absolutely love this poem~! So much emotion put into every word~! I loved it kiwi good job~!^^

!The GunGrave of Trigun

It was weird for me im like what what i really didnt care for it i get it but thought it was weird but keep writing.

Tetsanosuke Kirikami

" The Garden of Everything " Seems like an inspiration for this one.

Anyway, Only a tiny bit of grammar issues. not much.

It was okay, it didn't spark me much but you tried and that's what counts.

Well done.

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