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    Eternal Love

    Call me your gentle touch
    A perfume of sweet blossom,
    With a fragrances breath as a rose
    For wings pure white as a dove.

    Call me your sweet dagger
    A perfected drop of blood,
    With a dark death to come
    For a fallen angel you won.

    Call Me Your Eternal Love!~


    [Hope yal it,i know its kinda a short quick poem...its kinda about love and yet in despair and fallen...for those who dont understand i guess thats kinda all you need to know a love yer despair kinda poem it is!^ ^]
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    Re: Eternal Love

    not really my cup of tea for a poem, i dislike emo and love poems >_>

    but that won't stop me from helping out! the words you used are very well done, but at some points the flow is too fast. Maybe using a synonym would make the flow much better. Not sure if that's a spelling error on the first line, is it?

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    thats really good...well for bieng short. im use to long romantic peoms that make you think hard about what is being said!
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    Re: Eternal Love

    thats really good...well for bieng short. im use to long romantic peoms that make you think hard about what is being said!
    Thank you <3 Kira77 ^ ^

    I like the long romantic peoms as well and yes it does make you think i agree <3 Its just that i wrote this one day bored in class and so it wasnt really much to it but i thought it was kinda ok next time i'll try to wirte a better one thank you once again!^ ^
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