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    Eternal skies and dreams

    this is like my reality dream

    music flowing through my ears
    light's of hope washing all my bloody tears
    reliving bresse giving a peacefull feeling
    blue shining skies giving sensation
    of love and happines
    A shining start giving an eternal night
    eternal mornings
    giving enough peace to wash all the pain
    no need for money, no need to pay
    to have such a nice life with glorious day
    an eternal view to see
    the deep blue sea
    green forest through all the planet
    no contamination or desairs
    to kill and destroy all that is natural and quiet
    just what human being wishes to see
    just eternal blue skies and true dreams
    heaven just letting u in
    like it were ur on home
    ur on place to live
    no bad things or commited sins
    just a place for evryone to be
    Last edited by Baal; Sep 07, 2006 at 05:29 PM.



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    Re: Eternal skies and dreams

    I have a feeling that I've read a poem that's like that but a different tone of it. oh well that's just me. anyways I love it! I could see why you were chosen of the best poet. =P
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    Re: Eternal skies and dreams

    Spelling Baal. Spelling...

    And yes, it does seem as if I've read the same words. I'm not saying that you didnt write it. I'd just like to see something of your own put into those words. You have the imagery down, but there's nothing special about what you wrote.
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    Re: Eternal skies and dreams

    Good use of imagery, it allows the read to picture himself in quiet serene place!

    "Look for the mischievous paw prints in the sand, and as they disappear into this earth torn land. Will they be true or stay forever blue? That's were this BlueFox will stand."

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    Re: Eternal skies and dreams

    Good one but the spelling...this one's like a song...

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    Re: Eternal skies and dreams

    its cool i realy like it, very good imagry and it realy captures the feeling good one

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